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A Dream's Interpretation

At the beginning
I'll start,

a little rotten apple
grew into a tree,
ten days grew without temptation
in and off the body grazing.

Diamonds and mirrors
unthread the room.
A typo appeared in the windows
magnified many times.

Something fled into the sun,
flung to earth,
the translation error
of the inferno.

You are turned to altered figments,
the pattern the child sees...

(obscured)

Doesn't exist,
doesn't matter

(if you dreamed it)

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  • islekine silver member
    November 10, 2007
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    very interesting write

    Write on!
    *PEACE*

  • Mercury Rising
    September 25, 2007

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    Really abstract and surreal and dream-like. An excellent poem indeed. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.

    David


  • Touchof1der silver member
    April 21, 2007
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    In a world that is filled with so much strife and confusion, it is such a pleasure to come here and just simply get lost in poetry of this caliber. I really needed this escape. Thank you for sharing your work here at Allpoetry and keep that pen handy!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 21, 2007

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    You are turned to altered figments,
    the pattern the child sees...


    what else to say about this verse accept that I am here under a tree of mysterious sentiments with interpretatn of life...It is truely so heartfelt emotional work scripted by the heart of the poet only...The sentiments of the poem are so innocently stating the universal scene of the soul ...the structure of this work is indeed powerful in terms of the intensity of thought... A great work is here...


  • MissAnonymous
    April 20, 2007

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    i liked this and all the metaphors you used. it was simple but still made a statement. good luck in your writing!


  • Ryno
    April 20, 2007

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    Very abstract wording and I really enjoyed the topic you discussed and so smartly phrase lines. "The rotten apple tree" type plan in that second stanza was very smart and deep. Good work! Thanks for entering and for sharing. Best wishes!
    ~Ryan~

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