You left, and I was but an empty shell
Nothing inside, my life is all a lie
It seems I can't be free from this new hell
It seems there's nothing left except to die
I do not know if I can trust again
My heart is broken far beyond repair
Will life ever decide to let me win?
Will anyone ever decide to care?
Sometimes I feel like I cannot go on
My love, will you ever come back to me?
Life is not worth living when you are gone
If I have hurt you, please help me see
I am trapped now; I don't know what to do
Please come back to me because I miss you
Author notes
"Group project" for English. I started with a line, then wrote 13 more. Nobody in my group did anything. Ah well, I'm proud of it. My first sonnet!!!!! Woohoo!
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this is really depressing, but i like it. sorry to hear about your group project...those suck. anyway, if this is a real story, sorry youve had to go through such pain. i really like your work and i look foward to reading more of it.
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really sums up how most ppl feel... o yea i love the rhymes too!!!! woot woot tori
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very nice job at a sonnet!
its hard to go on without a loved one. most of us usually experience that at some time or the other.
i like the lines
I do not know if I can trust again
My heart is broken far beyond repair
Will life ever decide to let me win?
Will anyone ever decide to care?
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I like this. For your first sonnet, it seems like you're familiar with the format. Good job. Thanks for the positive feedback on my poem. I feel better now.
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i like this poem. i am afraid to say anythign more. if i do ill like ruin the moment(kinda hyoer right now)great write.
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This is good... I hate groups that don't work with you... it's stupid... but you did amazing! Hope you get a good grade! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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your on what i like to call the forever stage. bcuz feeling empty inside while you take time to move on seems like it lasts forever.
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Lol. I'm doing this too, but 2/3 of my members are actually helping! Great Job. Liked it alot-awesome for your 1st sonnet
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it rymes and is sincre. Great job and i hope they come back to you... God bless.peace
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