It’s not easy bein’ sleazy, you’ve said this many times
I can’t believe you’d hurt me, committing those crimes
My heart is tearing, ripping apart
Dumping, to you, has become an art
After all I gave, boy, why are you bein’ so cold?
This tug and push game is getting kind of old
Wring me out and throw me on the floor
Just like an old rag from the night before
You walk around like you’re the king of the world
[When, in fact, you’re just a supersonic-nobody]
Author notes
this poem is about a past breakup that im still torn over.
A contest entry
- Wear your heart on your sleeve!!! ♥ by Weetzie bat.
550 points, ended April 26, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Honey.. this is sooo emotionly awesome!
Loves your work.. every bit of this captivates me!
xoxo
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I really liked it! great write.
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I love this poem its a little rhymy but it doesn't detract from the overall poem and its not like dr. sues wich is good lol--great job--i've felt this way b4 as aim sure every1 has!
I LOVE the last 2 lines--great ending
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"My heart is tearing, ripping apart
Dumping, to you, has become an art"
Gah; Mmkay, Try staying away from baby rhymes like "part/heart/art" && "floor/whore/more" etc. Also adding words that make sense to fill the space disrupts the flow a tad.
"[When, in fact, you’re just a supersonic-nobody]"
There's Supersonic Again =] haha.
♥ Break ups blow more than a whore on prom night.
Don't let it get to you, okay?
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Awh buga-boo *huggles* This was soo sweet and sad.
Wring me out and throw me on the floor
Just like an old rag from the night before
You walk around like you’re the king of the world
[When, in fact, you’re just a supersonic-nobody]
Those lines just sorta summed it up. I love you to death!
xoxo,
Your Dumspter Doll
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After all I gave, boy, why are you bein’ so cold?
This tug and push game is getting kind of old
Wring me out and throw me on the floor
Just like an old rag from the night before
Love love it doll!!!
[[H.h.h.oneyHowDoYouDoIt]]
Im so sorry for your pain behbeh doll
you dont deserve it
&.& One day you will find the perfect person for you honey!
Cross//my//♥
(hopeTOdie)
♥Love♥ Your Mistress
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behbeh!
ur such a sweetie!
i [lalalove]you always and forever!
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"You walk around like you’re the king of the world
[When, in fact, you’re just a supersonic-nobody]"
i LOVED this line!
very great write!
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thnks cutie!
ur a sweetie!
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You walk around like you’re the king of the world
[When, in fact, you’re just a supersonic-nobody
love it
babe don't worry about it, chances are its not worth it ♥
smiiiiiiile♥
x
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thnx behbeh!
ur sweet!
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i know someone like this.
exxxes are the worst.
&& full of heartbreak && disappointment.
sorry babe.
their not worth it.
[i swear]
[huggles && snuggles]
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thnks bbbydoll!
ur so sweet!
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