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Serenity

mornings greet us
with lost songs
captured in the wind

directing the rhythm
into our unborn
stagnant ears
(maybe we should have
listened before)

the countryside
backyard lake
lays frozen, but
not cold

forever still in
melodies of droughts

finally deciding
to breathe in the
worldly air, I

greedily take breathes
upon inhales

before realizing
this is nothing but
the city
playing tricks

with false tranquility...

 

Author notes

"You cannot kill that which you did not create"
~
Title Option - "Serenity"

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  • in-the-twilight
    April 19, 2007

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    OMG... Ryan I LOVE IT! It's musical and so inspirational... love the quote too! Rock on! oxoxoxoox Meg


    • Ryno
      April 20, 2007
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      Ya, you see that is the weird thing- I don't remember putting it there


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    April 19, 2007

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    the is a great quote, i think i heard it off a song, but you did a great job on this, there is something that makes it well live up to the name you have set for it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest.


  • DarkHunter
    April 19, 2007

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    This is really well written, you have described things beautifully in this poem. It makes me think of a mirage in the desert, which is the falseness you have described seeing. The ending is excellent and it's a really good poem. Best of luck in the contest. James.


  • Shade Aurelia
    April 19, 2007

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    Which option did you choose? You forgot it in your comments. Otherwise, very deep and thoughtful. Good luck.


    Shade


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 19, 2007

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    Deep, much more than meets the eye here. Can we not trust ourselves to decide what is real and what is not? Can we imagine what is not there, trying to make reality out of dreams? You are on a roll....


    • Ryno
      April 19, 2007
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      Thank-You. I have been proud of the meanings I am able to put behind my most recent writes.

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