I can only show you this one
here on this page
But I have a garden
inside of me
filled with this beauty
And it’s just waiting
to burst out in life
So if you lay next to me
I can let you forget
all your worries
the fears
to find yourself
And those three words
you will hear
to remind you
of the beauty I see
within you
But I can show you more
because they are not enough
I don't know where or when
and I am confused as well
But before we get to old
let us not waste time
Come lay here with me
Let me look into your perfect eyes
To see your beauty
your garden..
bursting..
I will give you
all that I ever was
all that I am
it’s just needing your grace
to forget the world
We don't need anyone
just you and me
So come just lay here
and show me your garden
bursting into life
For now I can only show you
one of this beauty
but I have a whole garden
inside of me
Author notes
This poem is inspired by a song that means a lot to me.
I once got it from some one that was the world for me...but it didn't ended the way it was written....
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zxXwIIBlSgw
Chasing Cars
We'll do it all
Everything
On our own
We don't need
Anything
Or anyone
If I lay here
If I just lay here
Would you lie with me and just forget the world?
I don't quite know
How to say
How I feel
Those three words
Are said too much
they're not enough
If I lay here
If I just lay here
Would you lie with me and just forget the world?
Forget what we're told
Before we get too old
Show me a garden that's bursting into life
Let's waste time
Chasing cars
Around our heads
I need your grace
To remind me
To find my own
If I lay here
If I just lay here
Would you lie with me and just forget the world?
Forget what we're told
Before we get too old
Show me a garden that's bursting into life
All that I am
All that I ever was
Is here in your perfect eyes, they're all I can see
I don't know where
Confused about how as well
Just know that these things will never change for us at all
If I lay here
If I just lay here
Would you lie with me and just forget the world?
In a list
A contest entry
- The Best From The Best Contest by JeannieD Hunter.
2200 points, ended April 21, 2007, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Inspiration - Celebrating my Fifth year on allpoetry by me alone.
700 points, ended January 7, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful indeed!
Dear Lady Wolf Mistress,
What in this piece was observable was love itself.. a power helping you flow it through your words to create something which is named “A Love Poem” and by your choice “The beauty I see....”. What is love? Is love a candle when it melts away and heaves a sigh? Or a butterfly when she place life on her palm and burns away in presence of her beloved (Candle)? Or maybe love is woe when it is painted with the color of joy!
The strange point is many people –not just poets- have talked about love. Love is love itself with its own attractions and pain of course.
Honestly a beautiful piece from a clever/lovely thoughts.
Thanks for sharing with us :-)
~Vernal Bloom~
PS. Lovely rose, too!
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Beautiful Garden...
awe this was so lovely, O can't believe I haven't commented on this one yet, i thought I had
beautiful and so full of love, both the poem and the writer
xo
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This was a great write on the song. A very beautiful write. I'm sorry that i dont allow prewrites tho, as this is def a great one. I really love this song too. I really like the lines:
Come lay here with me
Let me look into your perfect eyes
To see your beauty
just beautiful! keep up the great work!
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Thank You!!!!
It's just because I am in to many things right now because else I would have bin into your wonderful contest
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You paint a wonderful image, offering lots of nourishment. Thank you
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oh! inner beauty! what an original way of putting this! i'm really amazed!
I'm not sure though that you did what I asked you to. it fits the song - yes. But it was also supposed to be so that your text could be sung in the song as a lyric, which I really wasn't able to. did you not understand this correctly (I suck at explaining) or am I getting it wrong?
Still I'm gonna put you in the finalists list, since I love your poem.
Please feel free to have another go at this option, because no one else has yet!
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I read it over, and with the second explanation, I am Dutch you know
.....Yep now I understand
..no it's not like you could sing my poem with the music..and I am not sure if I find me time to write something...If I can do it you will be able to sing it
Thank you for your wonderful commentI 'think it's a great compliment you just gave me here
XXJeannette
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you're welcome!
Btw - if you are able to write in dutch you should enter my other contest
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I already did
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oh cool! I can't tell since I don't know your name here. this contest is anonomous but the other one isn't. confusing
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Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine
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I think we all have a garden inside us, but some of us don't tend our gardens and they turn to weeds. Fantastic poem
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Absolutely Beautiful
Very well Expressed. Im speechless, but I really enjoyed this and the Pic is Gorgeous
Ephiphany
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BREATH TAKING
Such a beautiful well written poem. Those words:I have a whole garden inside of me: they are so sweet and hold such promise in each word. I am thrilled you won bronze but feel it should have been gold
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Thank you so much Tender Wolf,
Your comment means a lot to me...and I am sure some day this garden will have flowers too againAnd if not I just buy me some in the store
XXJeannette
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Congratulations on winning bronze, this is awesome. The line about the garden inside you is brilliant. Your poetic talent continues to soar and it is a pleasure to read as always.
James.
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Congratulations on the bronze. I love the metaphor of the garden within.
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This was an beautiful penning poet. Enjoyable to read, thanks for this beautiful entry,we wish you the best,
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Thank you for your wonderful comment It means a lot to me
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Wow! This is awesome. It just flows with such emotion! Very beautifully written. You have really shown your heart in this write. Thanks so much for this entry and good luck!
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Thank you Jeannie, I was so happy to see you liked it..and thanks again for the bronze and all these points with it
XXJeannette
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Very Pretty
A very pretty sounding poem. Your pen spills feeling and heart. Job well done, best of luck with this contest friend.
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Thank you my friend, thank you for your wonderful comment...it means a lot to me....
I hope you are okay....
XXJeannette
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