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Chronic Disillusionment

The knife p
                l
                u
              n
              g
                e
                  Separating mind from body
                        like a crowbar in my skull
                Destroying my resistance
                        as the anger takes its toll.

I am
                the madman with the gun.
I am
                the bloodstained chosen one.



They will whisper of my deeds for years to come
With tight lips painted black.

Author notes

This has to do with the feelings I am experiencing in regards to the shooting at VT. And no, I am not alluding to myself committing a crime.

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  • Papers
    May 20

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    Dark and powerful. I loved the way this was formatted (took me a second to think of that word). It really gave a spendid image of the word "Plunges". Great job, and keep up the wonderful work!


  • filledwithstardust
    November 9, 2007
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    This is really good. I wrote something similar to this, that was really morbid, because I felt a little morbid at the time. I still think its a pretty cool piece, but everyone who reads it thinks it is lacking tact. Then again, people also tell me that I have no tact. Wow I am rambling...ok so the whole point of this was that I like the poem. lol


  • Restless and True
    April 24, 2007

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    Wow.

    This was a powerful piece.

    I really think you did a great job on this. The format was awesome and it gave it alot more meaning.

    ~SweetAmber~