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Death of a Warrior

Rain fell in silence,
Upon this field of war.
The waves drummed in unison,
Across the distant shore.

The wind raked the land,
Of all good times there were before.
A darkness was sure to spread,
The moon was sure to implore.

The darkness brought with dread,
And grew to watch us strain.
It concealed our hatred,
And smirked upon our pain.

Our faces remained composed,
And our limbs did not falter.
We saw to the sacrifice,
And put or blood on the altar.

The wind in the trees was barely a whisper,
No song of the songbird was heard.
A silence has rung through the night,
For the breaking of trust had been endured.

Two warriors had argued,
A settlement of old was made.
The one was no longer to live,
As the ancient rules forbade.

A fight to the death,
Was sure to make peace.
But or blood would still spill,
And our pain would not cease.

All the breath froze in mid air,
As the warriors took oath.
The battle was looking grim,
Both eyes reflected loath.
  ~    ~    ~

Kaiga strode forward,
Her head held up high.
She snarled her pleasure,
At the thought that one must die.

She knew that the pack,
Would pray for her demise.
She knew that she would win,
With her bared teeth as her disguise.

Her demeanor was confident,
Her blood lust was strong.
She looked to destroy reason,
Why the fight might be prolonged.

Her opponent Haruko,
Was willing to die for what he believed.
He stood tall to accept the fate,
That he had been deceived.

A young and subordinate member,
He was bold to accept the fight.
The view of such a battle,
Was all but a common sight.

He was strong with his bite,
And his mind was iron wrought.
Kaiga observed from afar,
A weakness was what she sought.

Both wolves entered,
The ring of spectating members.
Both warriors had cold blood,
But eyes like simmering embers.

Haruko crouched low,
And a snarl ripped past his clenched jaws.
No wolf had ever challenged Kaiga,
And all had perked ears in awe.

Kaiga snapped her teeth,
And slashed her paw through the air.
Who was the wolf to challenge her?
How dare he! How dare!

Both snarls grew louder,
As the ebbed out of their chests.
Their teeth reflected their anger,
And their snapping voiced their detests.


At last Kaiga could take it no longer,
She urged to strike out unto pain.
Haruko sensed her displeasure,
But he could no longer detain.

She leapt through the air,
As all hope of survival was lost.
He had reached a locked door in his life,
And his life was the admission cost.

So here starts the battle-
We all know who wins.
But here is where all,
Of Kaiga’s sin begins.
          ~  ~  ~

Vitals hidden
Hackles up
Defense learned
When was a pup.

Teeth bared
Ears pinned
Howls among
The bitter wind.

Eyes locked
Hair on end
Slashing cuts
That shall never mend.

Paws dancing
Blood spilling
For his pack-
Give his life willing.

Daggers piercing
Clubs bruising
The rate of blood
At which he was loosing...

Dirt clouding
Blood caking
He was witnessing
His death in the making.

Took the risk
Accepted the fight
Almost a match,
Almost, but not quite.

Hope gone
Pride lost
He gave his life
To pay the cost.

Bone crushed
Paw slipped
Watching his own
Flesh be stripped.

Kaiga stopped the attack,
As Haruko lay with many fatal wounds.
He now fought two battles-
One of which was over soon.

The blood rushed from his shoulder,
His ears were both in shreds.
The fear of his death,
Was to all to with hold dread.

He saw Kaiga’s thought of action,
And he quickly planned his own.
He was to depart without sadness,
For he was never alone.

Kaiga lashed out at his throat’s vessel,
And sunk her teeth in deep.
Haruko closed his eyes in silence,
As he awaited the peaceful sleep.

But before Kaiga struck the final blow,
Before she blew out his flame,
Haruko howled his last remorse,
And all around did the same.

He howled a howl that shunned Kaiga,
And made all weep who listened.
It rang across the hills and hollows,
For his life was now distend.


He gave Kaiga one last glance,
And she smirked down at him in pride.
He left his thoughts unspoken,
As he lie there on his bloodied side.

The howl stopped short,
And all his breath froze within his throat.
Kaiga stamped her paw atop his hip,
As her signature of gloat.

Haruko’s world was turning dark,
Into death he began to pear.
His eyes fogged over,
And slid down his check was a lasts single tear.

Author notes

kaiga is pronounced kai(long i) a (long a) ga (short a)

haruko is pronounced ha (short a) ru (long u) ko (long o)

kaiga means remorse in japanese and haruko means...I seem to have forgotten...

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  • Dlvvanzor
    August 21, 2007

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    WOAH! Holy crud! That was amazing!

    Wow.

    The part that was the battle, how it got short and fast, just puts you in a trance. Amazing.

    Good luck in the contest,
    -Dlvvanzor


  • FallenAngel09
    June 13, 2007

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    Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I absolutely loved this poem. I was a little afraid taht it might not have adhered to the rules of the contest but there was just enough future in there to make it count. Beautifully done without overdoing it. Great job and good luck.

    Your Host,
    Tiphanie


  • dream5111
    June 1, 2007

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    "He saw Kaiga’s thought of action,
    And he quickly planned his own.
    He was to depart without sadness,
    For he was never alone." is my favorite part good luck


  • DemonChild
    May 30, 2007

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    Long and sweet

    Well done in this write the battle of two warriors death being the final judge of who has the right. I loved this poem good luck in the contest


  • Sgt B
    May 27, 2007

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    This could very well be titled an epic adventure inded

    I really was drawn into your story, Very well written. The flow was excellent the rhyme was on time Good job & good luck.


  • Artemis Gem
    May 23, 2007

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    looooong


    The darkness brought with dread,
    And grew to watch us strain.
    It concealed our hatred,
    And smirked upon our pain.

    Who was the wolf to challenge her?
    How dare he! How dare!

    So here starts the battle-
    We all know who wins.
    But here is where all,
    Of Kaiga’s sin begins.

    He had reached a locked door in his life,
    And his life was the admission cost.

    Haruko’s world was turning dark,
    Into death he began to pear.
    His eyes fogged over,
    And slid down his check was a lasts single tear.


    nice! such a beautifully sad tale

    pegle


  • PerfectImperfection
    May 19, 2007

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    This is a very endearing story, more so than a poem. Nice imagery throughout to create the scene. Needs a bit of attention to wording in places (or = our popping up a couple of times etc.). Thank you for your entry!


  • Gasp
    May 18, 2007

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    i love the words you use!! great description and emotion! great job! tyvm for entering!!

    ~!~keep writing~!~

    ~gasp~


  • J-Lee18m
    May 16, 2007

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    A little too long for my taste I kept losing track with all the lines. But I did enjoy it. You write really well. Good Luck

    Jordan Lee


  • KhaosFury
    May 3, 2007

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    It was a awesome write! Really long... but great imagery!!! Nice job and best of luck in my contest!
    ~Cosmic

    P.S.
    Can you tell me who you want to be in my family please? Sorry... I'm only a silver member x] Thanks!


  • NickelleteXninja
    May 2, 2007
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    extremely long...but it did keep my attention! WHICH IS GOOD!

    Well done and good luck


  • grass
    April 19, 2007

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    Hah. I do believe you have yourself a little mini-epic on your hands, huh? This is pretty good. I don't really dig the rhyme scheme, but you worked it well. This is nice.


  • lie
    April 19, 2007

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    What a hefty read! It was enjoyable though. You were able to stick through the whole theme without deterring and while I personally feel it may have charged on a little longer than necessary; this is one of the best pieces, in my opinion.
    The rhyme scheme was prominent but not dramatically seen. It helped the poem flow nicely. I like the break in structure near the middle of the poem. It makes the piece read a little faster, helping the reader to get through the poem better. Plus, I feel it's very fitting to the scene you were portraying in that section of the work.
    Overall, this is a very good poem; one of the best so far. Thank you for the entry. Stick around to see if Liberation of Sense will comment.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    April 18, 2007

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    this was long but worth it, i mean that you did a great job on this, man i wish i could do this, keep it flowing

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