Take my hand
Hold it to your breast
Show me your smile
Take my breath away
Press your lips to mine
Brush your tongue against mine
Hold my head in place
Steal my sanity
Rid me of my shirt
Pull out my hair-tie
Let my blushing cheeks make you smile
You have my heart
Lay me down
Let me watch as you shed your own clothes
Climb on top of your scared virgin
Capture my soul
Sooth away my fears
Leave me breathless and wanting more
Prove you love me
Invade my being
Tears roll down my cheeks
As you whisper “I’ll wait till you’re ready.”
I touch your breast and kiss your lips
This is why I love you
Author notes
I wanted to try something new...what do ya think?
Please tell me what you think
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Really liked it. I only seen one error while reading it..."Let me watch as watch as you shed your own clothes" I think you can take out "as watch". This was something new...and it was still very good. Congratulations!
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really good job
i really like this. -
I think you have an error in this line: Invade me being
Other than that, its the soft side of sexuality and I enjoyed it. Its innocent and charming. -
Very Cool
I really liked the ending -
it was sweet && cute && i love it
its just to innocent
&& tugs at the heartstrings
wonderful work to be able to capture emotion like that
cookies&&[love]
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this is pretty deep and very vivid. i like your play on words and how your telling a story. this really tells the story about a girl's first time. great write.
**Bloved**
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