I am an arsenic disaster
.beauty.queen.
[back of the alley;;make out slut]
Me and my marshmallow eyes
.carousel.trysts.
[never can mean anything to me]
I am an emotional wreck
.hold.me.up.
let me f
a
l
l
[car crashes;teenage whores;such a bore]
Nowhere to go;; everything to lose
baby this is what it feels to be
>>black&&blue<<
Nothing to grasp; cra-crashing too fast
Spinning around -- dancing on rainbow stars
I [swear] I'm never going to c r a s h
[you let me down]
Author notes
dancing marionette
A contest entry
- D.I.R.T.Y. P.R.E.T.T.Y. by Poetic-Dreamer.
600 points, ended April 26, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dirty Pretty by CazzieJade.
450 points, ended April 27, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring me Back to the Dark Side by Dark Whispers.
336 points, ended May 17, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Want More Family (prewrites allowed) by SoftlyScreaming.
525 points, ended July 20, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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im not all about dirty pretty, gets too distracting.. but i like the message you send.. ap mail me sometime so we can talk..
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I am an arsenic disaster
.beauty.queen.
[back of the alley;;make out slut]
Me and my marshmallow eyes
.carousel.trysts.
[never can mean anything to me]
^^[[you know]]
i love this poem i know the feeling you are just so awesome i love it and your poem rocks!!!! -
Interesting form but I have to say that the meaning of the poem is not clear more than halfway through the poem , but still it was nice
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A nice form.
I agree this is interesting and I did like the fall part, somehow I can't manage this right now. I do think it is unique and well just made for interesting reading.
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This is very interesting. At first read, I wasn't sure I liked it at all, but then I gave it a second read and thought to myself this is actually quite unique. The title and formatting you have chosen for this particular poem are most fitting with the theme flowing throughout the lines. I love the way you have penned this. You have displayed some very creative thinking on your part, as the writer, as well!
♥ Touchof1der
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Awesome write. The flow is great and this is well worded.
I really liked--
--"Nowhere to go;; everything to lose
baby this is what it feels to be
>>black&&blue<<"
That was my favorite line. I loved the format and everything this is great well done!!
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Beautiful
this was beautiful and i love the format of the poem you should think about a background i loves it
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Beautiful.
"Nowhere to go;; everything to lose
baby this is what it feels to be
>>black&&blue<<"
Very raw, touching and simple yet so revealing and powerful. You have created a wonderful piece.
Well done and goodluck within the contest you have entered.
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I'm just recently beginning to understand and read the dirty-pretty style, but this was definitely one of the better ones I have read. You definitely get an applause.
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'[back of the alley;;make out slut], [car crashes;teenage whores;such a bore]' those two are definitely my favourite two lines, really great write =]
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this piece is brilliant. i love it. well done on the contruction and format. very good use of symbols and white space. Very ggood piece. keep them coming. keep it real and take care of yourself.
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Very nicely writtten, this style makes the poem so much moe intriguing and fun. Nice work.
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wow! great write....you wrote it with such contadiction I loved it.....you have a great takent....keep writting
XTashaX -
this is a rare style of poetry, I've never read a poem in this format before, this was a really nice poem . Please return the favor
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as ive said before, i dont much go for the dirty pretty style. however, take away all that junk you get some good poetry. and amazingly i liked this one(i only liked one poem with the kind of style before) soo that says alot. i really liked the lines ">>black&&blue<<
Nothing to grasp; cra-crashing too fast" that has a lot of rythm to it and i like it
xoxox -
i loved the "Nothing to grasp; cra-crashing too fast" part of your poem, good DP write :]
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This is interesting.
A very rare style to see. It almost comes of as a techno song
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it was good but it wasn't necessarily my favorite type of poem. either way i like the feeling you put into it it showa that you have a great amount of talent. keep it up.
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