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untitled as of now

as of right now, everything is in place
nothing is out of line, we're winning this race
this picture perfect serenity
might not be as it seems
a layer of peace only surrounds
a bought of violence could soon arouse
deep inside, hate is slowly rising
the amount of pain is surprising
day after day, the anger swells
but the outer layers appear to be well
like a volcano boiling from below
the frustration violently explodes
a war between temptation and the divine
god's army is falling slowly behind
the devil's poison spreads like fire
it's so attractive, everyone's a buyer
the drug he sells are lies told to all
young minds decay, as civilization falls
corrupted children roam the streets
disturbing anyone that they see
the government is no more
politics still trying to settle the score
women selling themselves to buy
the only thing that keeps them alive
drug sales increase, as does the death toll
children are born premature and weak
a miracle is when one lives to be three
men are away at war for many years
the cause is lost but on they persevere
peace is unknown, health is history
all that is now is pain and misery
the trees are grey and a stench fills the air
but the people move on, little do they care
when the sun does shine beyond clouds of smog
it burns to the bone and fries eyes to slog
there's no hope for future, it all looks so dim
we're at the point of no return, and now on the brim
over the edge, happiness looks like the past
many jump to it and fall too fucking fast
they want to return to better days
regret fills every soul, forever and always
the devil wins battle after battle, no mistakes
defeating faith at every time, what does it take
we need to find a way out of this stranglehold
somehow break the chains in which we were sold
all of this can end, and we may begin once more
but it all starts with one, to open the first door

Author notes

yea, i started out with this as being about underlying anger and it evolved into something totally different. i think i might make this 2 poems, but i'll work on that later. for now, tell me what ya think.
constructive criticism is actually what i'm looking for. so don't be shy with your comments.

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  • SoS
    April 20, 2007

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    I agree with you, because I think this would work much better as 2 poems. Nice depiction of heaven and hell. Needs a bit of cleaning up, but you have yourself a good poem here.