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Nightmares

*~*
FRIGHT
NEAR ME
STEAL THEE HEART.
HAUNT, MY MIND DREAMS.
*~*
NIGHTS FULL OF ANGER,
ANXIETY IN MY SLEEP.
DREAMS, THEY AWAKEN ME DEEP,
HOLDING MY PILLOW.
*~*
LOOK OUT WINDOW,
SLEEP NEVER.
DREAMS DO
DROWN.

Author notes

OK ...HERES MY REWRITE BROTHER BEAR..I THINK I GOT IT DOWN IF NOT JUST LET ME KNOW AND I WILL EDIT AGAIN..THANKS FOR EXPLAINING TO ME..I REALLY APPRECIATE IT...I DO HOPE THIS FINDS YOU HAPPY WITH LIFE...as ALWAYS YOUR SIS FRANCES

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  • Arkbear gold member
    April 26, 2007

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    An Uncommon Entry ~

    OK....how do I say this without sounding

    like a rude brother ~

     

    OK...this is how I shall say it ~

     

    The Write is hauntingly superb ~

     

    The shape of the structure is not very eye

    appealing...as this Form requires much dedication

    to form it just right for the beauty it was

     intended to possess ~

     

    2.2 pts deducted for that ~

     

    The Form in stanza 3 was the best...

    yet, too much punctuation throughout the WHOLE poem

    can sometimes ruin a great entry...

    ...( .6 pts. deducted for that ) ~

     

    All CAPS are not appealing....but because of the

    story behind this, I actually think it helped out a bit

    to intrigue me with the storyline ~

     

    No pts. deducted this time for all CAPS ~

     

    Othan than all of that,

    this is not a bad entry....

    trust me...my grading scale has been

    tough on everyone thus far ~

     

    Nice entry ~

     

    Not bad at all ~

     

    The best to you in this contest Sis ~

     

    Brother Bear ~

  • Arkbear gold member
    April 24, 2007
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    Thank you for this entry ~

    Thank you so much for your entry ~

    I will review your entry for certain criteria

    expected from this contest ~

    If you do not hear back from me within

    2 hours of the contest deadline, you might

     want to review your own entry and

    make sure EVERYTHING

    in the RULES have been followed ~

    I will review syllable count just once,

    AND, if there is/are any line/s missing a syllable/s,

    I will let you know only ONCE!

     

    If you decide to enter a write without

    a syllable count, it better be good, as I can see you did ~

     

    I am looking forward to reviewing your entry ~

    However, Judging will NOT take place until

    closing of this contest, therefore,

    I will not read the Theme or

    Storyline until that time ~

     

    The best of luck to you in this contest!

     

    Sincerely,