as everyday passes by,
as the time i spend hearing every lie,
every moment i hope to die,
i know at the end i wouldnt ask myself why...
as i hear these hateful voices,
i know im stuck with regretful choices.
i could stay and dance in the rain,
act like i have nothing and hide all my pain.
in every ending of the day,
i sit and wonder if i was okay,
asking if my only true love is fading away,
to me my death i seek is the only way.
this is the time i spent with you,
every hour crying wondering if thy lie was true,
out of everything i knew you knew,
without you, my life as an incomplete oul with nothing to do.
as i wish apon my death,
i say my last farewell,
going to take my last breath.
Please tell me what you think
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I love how you used your words. Alot of people try to add so much detail and forget this is just a poem. And I find it easy sorta to write about how I feel because I find myself alone alot. So why waste a moment away. Very nice job I like it!
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amazing
this is such an amazing poem...very deep...i like as i wish apon my death,
i say my last farewell,
going to take my last breath
i love that part...ur great
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patience is really good ur good
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The first three stanza of the line caught my attension because it kinda decribes me and I feel the emotion within it..
"as everyday passes by,
as the time i spend hearing every lie,
every moment i hope to die,
i know at the end i wouldnt ask myself why...
as i hear these hateful voices,
i know im stuck with regretful choices.
i could stay and dance in the rain,
act like i have nothing and hide all my pain.
in every ending of the day,
i sit and wonder if i was okay,
asking if my only true love is fading away,
to me my death i seek is the only way."
Very good, keep it up!
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very good.
i find this poem really good i lke it so much and i think that u should really add those poems on here you wrote in ur notebook!!!! i find them really intersting and i think everyone else would find them two!!!!
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