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peace
showers
through evils
sorrow filled clouds
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God bathes sore spirits
with healing presence divine
loving compassion sublime
raise arms to receive
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within our hearts
comfort rains
His peace
rests
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Author notes
arkquain created by Arkbear
syllable count: 1,2,3,4,
5,7,7,5, (7 SYLLABLE LINES RHYME)
1,2,3,4,
In a list
A contest entry
- Virginia Tech Tragedy in Virginia. by CountryCousin.
600 points, ended April 22, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *~ Poetry Formed V ~* by Arkbear.
400 points, ended April 26, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - VIRGINIA TECH STUDENTS REMEMBERED by Sky Prince Ireland.
400 points, ended April 29, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In Honor Of Virginia Tech. by One Eunique Pixie.
575 points, ended April 23, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ Peace~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended June 14, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PEACE!!! by Shantti.
575 points, ended May 16, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very sweet and peaceful!
Love your background you chose too.
Thank you
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"God bathes sore spirits" Now how beautiful is that. A wonderful write. I wish you well in the contest.
Sam
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Thank you!
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AH, this is beautiful... the middle stanza is my favortie but as a whole this is just awesome! Nice presentation. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
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A very spiritual look at peace and a big delight to read soft and gentle reaching out to the soul.
Thank you for sharing with us, I like the thought of peace showering down through dark clouds
Very nice warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
A Lovely Tribute ~
This is a very wonderful and heartfelt Poem which
is befitting at this time ~
May you be always blessed for your compassion,
and may the Families feel the peace and
comfort of Gods' love upon them
in their time of loss ~
Bear ~
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Good timely poem, this world needs more peace and compassion. Wise words and wise council.
You might want to divide the stanzas with a different symbol and check syllable count in line eight(open arms to receive).
I enjoyed reading your poem.
Dennis
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Thank you for catching the problem with the syllable count.
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Very, Very pretty. It has a brilliant flow, and it is just a beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene.
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A most beautifully penned Arkquain and tribute to this tragedy.
I wish you all the best.
Gaylene
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I think you've done a great job with this form. Lovely imagery. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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A most peaceful, heartwarming tribute. Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck.
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A Devine Entry ~
First off....thank you for this tribute...
....to the lost, and to the survivors ~
Thank you so much for your entry ~
I will review your entry for certain criteria
expected from this contest ~
If you do not hear back from me within 12 hours of the contest deadline, you should have nothing to worry about as long as EVERYTHING in the RULES have been followed ~
I will review syllable count just once,
AND, if there is/are any line/s missing a syllable/s,
I will let you know only ONCE!
I am looking forward to reviewing your entry ~
However, Judging will NOT take place until
closing of this contest, therefore,
I will TRY not to read the Theme or
Storyline until that time, BUT,
sometimes I break my own rules and take a peek ~
The best of luck to you in this contest!
Sincerely,
Bear ~
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Thanks, Arkbear, for this beautiful poetic form.
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This is said well.
This is written well and it is enough. They understand the survivors and the students. You did a beautiful job and thank you for entering. -
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I reworded this a bit since you last read it. I'm happier with it now. Thanks for your comment.
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Very beautiful and comforting words! Great job!
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Thank you!
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