I ran all the way
It seemed to be faster
It was pouring with rain
As I ran into the hospital
I dripped on the floor
Ran to the desk and asked for
Miss moore
They showed me the way
Standing at the glass doors
I could see the doctors working
You looked so fragile
You were bleeding
They stopped were they done
Are you ok then
The doctor looked at her watch and said something
Looked out the doors sadly at me
How could it happen so quick
I didn't even get a chance to say goodbye
My mother taken before my sights
And I couldn't hold her hand make her feel less fright
I broken down in tears onto the floor
Couldn't be consoled for many years
I was too late that day
My dear mother slipped away
Author notes
I just have to say that this is pure fiction ispired loosely by something I saw on a tv show, My own mother is very well.
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Comments
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well this is still very sad and very good
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Very sad. Tearful. You have written a very lovely yet sad experience down. Thank you for sharing. It is beautiful!
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Very powerful. I know what you mean, b/c I lost my father. I tell you what, after his death, I was the meanest child you'de ever met. My grandmother told me that I needed to moveon, and told me a story that has, since then, helped me to move on and change
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