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Behind the Curtain

I opened the curtain
To see what I'd find
It didn't surprise me,
What was behind
I closed the curtain gasping
The detective strikes once more
Might as well say something now,
Before I shut the door

I'd really like to ask,
How you can tell me it's okay,
When everything you've said to me
Has echoed far away?
If you want to break bad news to me,
Then please don't make me wait
The drilling of foreshadowed truth
Is what I really hate

I promise you, I won't collapse,
I swear to you, I'd stay in tact
If you would tell me what's the truth
Or if this is an act
You know you can confide in me
If redeeming's what you seek
For you, I'd walk on broken limbs
In case you need to speak

There is no need to hesitate
'Cause I can take the wrath
I'd rather walk the clear road
Than trip through the misty path
A path where there's no answers
And you can't see where you are
I can tell you, it will never work,
With no sight, you can't get far

Could you please pull back that curtain,
To show me what I'll find?
It never will surprise me,
What I know will lie behind
Be quick and get this over with
I can't stand being blind
I don't care if I'm paralyzed,
Just please make up your mind

Author notes

April 17, 2007.... This is about my girlfriend... I was suspecting she might have been cheating on me with her ex when I wrote this poem. I found out they had been talking to each other and flipped out... Basically, this is about me wanting to know the truth, no matter what it is. I have a motto--- It's better to keep walking down the road of life, even if your surroundings may be horrifying. Because no matter how ugly it gets...

At least you know where you're going.

If the road is covered in fog, you could fall in a pothole or something. Just like what happens if someone lies, or doesn't tell the whole truth. Eventually, it skrews them AND you.

After I wrote this, I learned that I was overreating and she was merely talking to her ex, who told my girlfriend she's engaged.

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Heartbreak. So pretty much exactly the opposite of the previous option. (Again, not too cliché please).

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Comments

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  • SecretMe15
    October 31, 2007
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    Very real. It was like suspense.


  • LadysDragon
    August 11, 2007
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    God i hope she wasnt cheating.Anyways.Good luck! and thank you!

  • Midnight-x-Rose gold member
    July 19, 2007

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    I can definately understand. Sometimes I overreact when my boyfriend talks to someone of the opposite sex especially if an ex or an old fancy of his. But still, I know if he was going to stray it wouldn't matter what I did, flip or be calm, he'd do it anyway, same for your girlfriend, I expect. A nice little realistic write and yes, it's always good to know what's going on even if it's a bad thing.

  • Matt Holck
    July 13, 2007
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    would you stay with someone cheating on you?

    • AutumnsFlame
      July 13, 2007
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      No, I would not stay with someone who's cheating on me unless they have a damn good excuse.

  • I love SuperMan
    July 11, 2007
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    Thanks for entering in another one of my contests!
    xo
    Kandy

  • I love SuperMan
    July 9, 2007

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    very awesome poem i loved reading it. it was so emotional and powerful and well put together. thanks for entering it in my contest, good luck and best wishes
    xo
    kandy

  • Anfractuous
    June 28, 2007

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    Wow, this truly speaks your mind. I thought it was deep, and heartbreaking, but since things are actually ok, I am glad.
    It is good to know what is happening, even if it hurts. I like your motto, and your poem. Great write, and good luck.


  • Madison Mary
    June 28, 2007

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    Wow...amazing write. So much emotion in this one, the rhyme scheme is excellent. Thanks for entering and good luck!

  • Heavenly Angel
    June 5, 2007
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    Well done write! Thank you for sharing

  • ibsons hysops
    June 5, 2007
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    awsome

  • Florida Sunshine gold member
    May 27, 2007
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    Congrats on GOLD and honorable Winner~ It's a great poem well deserved...

  • Jenana
    May 6, 2007
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    good job. this is really good. not to mention in my favorite color lol.

  • andie11
    May 6, 2007

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    great

    and fabulous insight and honesty in your author notes, even if it was written for someone else. thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest

  • Bambaloo
    April 29, 2007

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    It never will surprise me,
    What I know will lie behind
    Be quick and get this over with
    I can't stand being blind

    Love that stanza. Some of the things were misunderstood before I wrote your notes, but I really like that you explained it. The quote is lovely and very true. I really enjoyed reading it, and I think you did a great job with describing the veil and curtains and shrouding to relate to what was happening in your life at that time. You definitely deserved that trophy, great job!


  • BeatenLove
    April 26, 2007

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    I liked this, and really liked the metephore of the curtain it gave it a whimsical touch...it was wonderfully written and I loved it....keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest

    XTashaX

  • His girl forever
    April 25, 2007

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    This is a good poem and your changing of the opt is perfectly ok... I have bi friends so I should remember to put things like that on there but it slipped my mind.... Please also add the word purple though...
    Good Luck
    ~*~ Mystic

  • cirrusfire
    April 18, 2007

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    Awesome

    An extremely well written poem!
    the story in the story was engaging ... your voice was fresh and upfront, while I didn't find it to be dark, I did find it to be excellent!


  • theghostofher
    April 18, 2007

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    i like this alot and good luck in the contest. im glad everything worked out ok for you and her. good luck and thanxs
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