Each night I go to bed
Diving into dreams of you.
There I can let you know
That my love for you is true
For I can never tell you
When we’re talking face to face.
My palms get all sweaty
And my heart begins to race.
Diving into dreams
Puts me at ease with you.
Diving into dreams
Praying that they come true
If I cannot be with you
The next best thing will do.
So I’ll just keep on falling,
Diving into dreams of you.
I haven’t felt this way
Since I was a kid in school.
But as man of my years
I feel like a goddam fool.
Yes I need to let you know
What it is I feel inside.
It's such a tragic feeling
My love I try to hide.
Diving into dreams
Puts me at ease with you.
Diving into dreams
Praying that they come true
If I cannot be with you
The next best thing will do.
So I’ll just keep on falling,
Diving into dreams of you.
I just have to find the nerve
To tell you just how I feel.
Someone else will come along
And from me, your love he’ll steal
So I’m down here on my knees
With my heart held out it's true
I'm baring my soul and
Diving into love with you.
Diving into love
I’ve always wanted to
Diving into love
Sharing my love with you
All the time that I have wasted
Dreaming what has become true
I'll spend all my life
Diving into love with you.
Author notes
option one
A contest entry
- Use This Line by piccola.
550 points, ended April 19, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Sounds lyrical and nice words of love.
Good luck.
Michael -
Please read the contest requirements
This poem, although rhyming, did not meet the MAIN requirements of my contest. Please read again what I request next time and I look forward to considering your future work in my little contests. -
this is sweet...
A bit too repetitive for me, but I thought it was nicely done and has a great message.
Thank you for entering and keep up the good work!!!
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I liked it. Its very sweet and has a nice story. I think the first part ended funny, like you stated something and then went to the beginning of the statement.. I don't know if that made sense. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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This was a pretty good poem... It flowed really well with the sylabols and all, some of the rhymes were a bit cliche though... Example: school/fool... You could've thought of something better there... Overall, it was pretty darn good.
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This is such a great write!! Definitely gold-trophy-worthy!! I love the rhyme and what you're saying and how you used the line (I read the contest). Great great job. Thanks for sharing. Take care.
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beautiful
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wow. you used this line very well and impressed me with your rhyme too. It's lovely and something I enjoyed reading. Thank you for the entry.
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