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To Be or Not To Be...That's My Dad

My Dad was there and not
He showed up when he wanted
Though it wasn't alot

I met him twice, once when I was 14
another when I was 16
But no time in between

Dropped off at his house by my mother
For she had plans
Of being with another

Man

I shouldn't have cared
One way or the other
It's just that it wasn't just me
She also left my brothers

Needless to say we were treated so different
From the family that he already loved
The rage, anger and hurt
Down my throat it was shoved

He watched me shower
Videotaped me half naked
Bribes for sexual acts
All of this abuse I'd taken

Now it's over
A new leaf I've turned
In the crude school of life
Just another lesson learned

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  • SerenityNChains gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    Sad, so very sad. I hopeyou find healing either in counseling or via your writes, and may he find justice someday.

    Serene


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 11, 2008

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    Very well written. I am sorry you had to go through what you did. The rhyme is very well done. The emotions are clear.

    Mike


  • Symphony
    October 1, 2008

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    "He watched me shower
    Videotaped me half naked
    Bribes for sexual acts
    All of this abuse I'd taken"

    Oh dear God... ! Im speechless at this .. just - to see it out in open speech... just wow... i truly don't know what to say, except to send a hug your way


  • trekkergirl
    September 30, 2008

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    I am sorry for this abuse you suffered. Did you use the videos to get this sick man arrested? So he didn't do it to anyone else? See I think that's the problem right there... when children are the victims there is no one there to protect them... and by the time... if they ever do... they understand that they can speak up its already to late... like in my case... my abuser is dead. I can't speak up to him and face him and call him everything that i truly want to.


  • xxprophet gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    Wow...Dee I feel u here lady...Thank you for sharing this...Incredible! His story (History) told...Love that you are keeping that head up and keeping yourself moving forward...I loved this poem lady. I feel u here in every sentence and word used. I truly loved it and appreciate you asking me to read. Thank You Lady...Give a Shout back K


  • forgottENtragEdy
    February 14, 2008
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    wow this is a very good poem.
    your an awesome writer!
    God bless you and your future! much luv

  • zorman32
    October 19, 2007
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    Horrible

    Not the poem, the feeling that it instills about the 'man' (wrongly so named). The statement about lessons learned seemed blunt, but it fits well with the context of the 'schooling.' Some people defy explanation in what they approve of certainly, and their victims are heroes sometimes to even want to be alive. Good luck in the contest.


  • Heavens Child
    August 16, 2007

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    Your honesty and strength in this piece is amazing. Some parents don't realize their children are a gift, given to them only for a time. The best of luck to you in the contests.


  • McRae by nature
    August 16, 2007

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    This is harsh and sad. Great job with the rhyme. I realy liked this piece. Thanks for entering it.

    Carrie


  • Dead Star--x
    July 25, 2007

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    i like the positive outlook on the end a lot-thats what is important when going through that memory. thanx for entering & good luck
    Cure My Tragedy


    • cre8tiv-writer
      July 25, 2007
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      If I focused on the bad, I would've committed suicide or something by now. So, it's better to be positive so that one can look forward and get through it.


  • Broken Machine
    July 18, 2007
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    Wow, I am so sorry. That's horrible. If you ever need someone to talk to I'll listen.


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    April 25, 2007

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    That is horrid, that a father would videotape his daughter showering--if I everger my hands on a perverted punk like that, I swear, I will kill him. Anyway...I am sorry you were treated so badly, like you meant nothing, by both your parents. It seemed convenient for them to just shuffle you around when one or the other had plans for themselves, and it just isn't right to put your interests ahead of your child's when you're a parent. You will prevail, though...they will come to have to depend on you one day.

    Take care and I hope all is better now.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


    • cre8tiv-writer
      April 26, 2007
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      Yeah, it was an extremely rough time in my life, but I made it through with the help of GOd. I'm sure that I would be dead from suicide or something awful if it weren't for Him. Thanks for your concern, I enjoyed the contest!!


  • XxMysticalFantasyxX
    April 17, 2007

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    OMG this is so terrible its so awfull what happened to u...I am so sorry no one should be treated like that u must be in so much pain thats insane. What a sicko I am terribly sorry u poor thing if u ever need to talk to someone Ill let u know now even tho u dont know me u can talk to me...I know what u are going through its probably haunting u! This poem is great and keep writing it helps


    • cre8tiv-writer
      April 18, 2007
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      Thanks so much for caring!! I just hope this is inspiration enough to help someone else!! It does haunt me at times, but I've learned to get through it. It's hard sometimes though when I see commercials and witness father-daughter dances at weddings....but it's ok I guess.....Thanks again, HUGS!!!

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