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~Amen~

~*~
I
In Prayer
Speak to God
Talk to my Friend
~*~
Simple Words to God
A Quiet Ode to His View
A Silent Vow to be True
Words that Mean so Much
~*~
Knowing He Hears
He Does Care
My Lord
Thanks
~*~

Author notes

Hee, Smile! I tried!

*& In my seven-liner, the firsts one was going to end with love instead of view but i needed an end rythme, *tear* lol

~Katie

** And I posted with the word Amen on the end the first time, Duh! 1 not 2 Katie!!!

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  • Arkbear gold member
    April 26, 2007
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    Another Lovely entry ~

    The eye appeal is beautiful ~

    Perfect syllable count ~

    However...I felt that each line was

    rigged with a jagged flow...

    1.8 pts deducted for that ~

    But....it did NOT take away from the

    wonderful message which you so

    well presented in this write ~

    The best to you in this contest ~

    Bear ~


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    April 18, 2007

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    Lovely write. This line doesn't seem to fit your message: "Proud in my Faith". I think you could pen a more profound line about prayer there. The rest of it works well.

  • Arkbear gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry ~

    Thank you so much for your entry ~

    I will review your entry for certain criteria

    expected from this contest ~

    If you do not hear back from me within

    12 hours of the contest deadline, you

    should not have anything to worry about,

    as long as EVERYTHING in the

    RULES have been followed ~

    I will review syllable count many times,

    AND, if there is/are any line/s missing a syllable/s,

    I will let you know only ONCE!

    I am looking forward to reviewing your entry ~

    However, Judging will NOT take place until

    closing of this contest, therefore,

    I will TRY not to read the Theme

    or Storyline until that time.....however,

    .....sometimes I get tempted to break

    my own rules and take a peek ~

    SMILE...God loves YOU! 

    The best of luck to you in this contest!

    Sincerely,

    Bear ~

    PS...Thank you for knowing the correct way to

    use the word prayer as a

    one syllable word

    in this case ~ 

     http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/prayer

     


  • Twins 4 me
    April 17, 2007
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    Very pretty! I love the short and sweet write to the Lord! Great job!