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Echo of Adonai

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 Echo of Adonai

 

When… When… When… When…
Will you realize I’m here
When… When… When… When…
Will you know of my ebb

Why… Why… Why… Why…
Have you suppressed me
Why… Why… Why… Why…
Don’t you hear to me

Know… Know… Know… Know…
That I am within you
Know… Know… Know… Know…
That I am God

 

 

 

 

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  • Danna Hobart
    December 29, 2008

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    Well, you certainly found a creative way to convey the echo in this. As far as teh poem goes, it is very simple. Thank you for entering.


  • melphleg gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Had to check this out. Adonai is one of my favorite Hebrew names for God. Good questions. Simple. I love the answer at the end. Perfect.


  • RedAquarius
    June 15, 2007

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    Fantastic device here, what a great idea to utilize the shrinking font to strengthen the echo feeling. I almost worried the repeat would be overkill but I think the shrinking usage is what makes it unique and clever, rather than just overly repititive.

    Lovely spiritual write!


    • Amera gold member
      June 15, 2007
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      Thanks! I thought it was cool too but it didn't go over as well as I thought.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 18, 2007
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    Simply, bravely, brilliantly penned. Thank you.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 16, 2007

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    I like the echos It gives a reverberationg affect.
    Gives a feel for God wanting us to love him and know he is there very good


  • painfully amazing
    May 4, 2007
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    wow..this is amazing=]


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    April 30, 2007

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    SAD BUT TRUE

    This brought tears to my eyes your simple words of wisdom yet so profound thank you so much for sharing this wonderful thought


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    April 18, 2007

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    Interesting!

    What a cool way to show the echo effect with the fonts getting small. It's amazing how that affected the reading.

    My favorite part was, "When will you know of my ebb." When the sea ebbs, it pulls away from the earth, much like an echo does as it faints. The sounds seems farther and farther away, more quiet with each repitition. I love the sounnd of that line, but it seems to contradict the idea of God being within you. If he is "within you" how can he "ebb" unless you mean only the sound of him. Just a thought.

    The title is beautiful and you make a valid point that people often suppress the voice of God in their lives.

    Nice poem. Very cool idea.

    ten thousand cicadas


  • NickelleteXninja
    April 18, 2007
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    BEAUTIFUL

    amazing


  • Desire gold member
    April 18, 2007

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    Oh My!!


    Holy Moly


    Powerful piece penned my Friend
    I am almost speechless!!
    Thank You for sharing this Gift

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • onejewel
    April 18, 2007

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    This is lovely. The way you use repetition makes the tone very haunting and urgent yet also passive. Thanks for sharing this.

  • mcheadle
    April 18, 2007
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    FEELINGS WOW WHAT FEELINGS

    YOU TOUCH THE SOLE OF A PERSON WITH THIS POEM BLESS YOUR HEART AMEN.


  • MysticAngelEyes
    April 18, 2007
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    Wow that was very reptitive, but you made it work so well. Great job.


  • PerVirtuous
    April 17, 2007
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    Well constructed. Powerful and excellent use of the repetition. Three bunnies!!!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    the ebb and flow of God's love is essential to both emotional and physical health of any human. This was a superb write Amera, I mean it, this is nice, very nice and touching. A bookmark...



    Dad


  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    The Still Small Voice!

    Powerful! To say the least! It is like God speaking echoes within...The still small voice, or that powerful echoing voice that some of us have heard..It gets' our attention for sure..Here God is saying "Be still and know that I am God!" Trust me! I am in control! The faith as this little child in the picture and the face of Jesus so gentle and peaceful and loving! It all says enough...Your words niece bring it all together....Lovely, darling!


  • Twins 4 me
    April 17, 2007
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    Beautiful! This echoes through my soul! Great job and good luck in the contest!

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