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My essence is the place you think you know.

My essence is the place you think you know.
A seastar lying lonely in the sand.
Marvel at me and watch the roses grow.

I am a fright'ning blemish in the snow.
The longing for the passion you withstand.
My essence is the place you think you know.

I am the sea that Moses ceased to flow.
A T-Shirt which across a rope is spanned.
Marvel at me and watch the roses grow.

I am a robin sitting on a hoe.
The Templar shields which by brave knights were manned.
My essence is the place you think you know.

I am the antique hot-rod brought to show.
A voice from an exotic far-off land.
Marvel at me and watch the roses grow.

I am a bull who's rider he must throw.
The broken heart you hold within your hand.
My essence is the place you think you know.
Marvel at me and watch the roses grow.

Author notes

My attempt at a villanelle... with a few pattern add-ins of my own.

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  • Swan song gold member
    April 18, 2008
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    This is truly a lovely lovely villainelle! A pure treasure to read Well done!


  • Jeff.W
    May 12, 2007
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    NICE!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This is a really great poem.I like it alot.

  • Virgoan
    April 26, 2007

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    This is a great piece! I like how you've painted the red in this piece in a very sublime and intrinsic manner.

    My favorite lines:

    I am a fright'ning blemish in the snow.
    The longing for the passion you withstand.
    My essence is the place you think you know.

    This is as good as how you have started the poem. Though, with this stanza you have given wonderful figurative language.

    Thanks for sharing and see you around.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • nanashiamai
    April 18, 2007

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    i love this dear! its lovely. and not quite a villanelle but beautiful and amazing and...ah...i love it. absolutely. this is wonderful, dear. ^_^


  • Dragonsblood
    April 18, 2007

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    well done I like how this piece has so much rhythm and the words are well used with much imagery and scatter to this red of yours.


  • Arycan
    April 18, 2007

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    I really like the images that you used in the peom they were very affective. It is an amazing peom dear. I wish you luck.

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