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The sun is coming in
softly whispering to me
telling me to come
to the window
The breeze is blowing
the smell of lilacs
into my bedroom
as the rest of the house
sleeps soundly
not at all bothered
by the morning breeze
And as I watch
the rosy glow of the sun
like a candle
glowing from behind the mountains
I realize
she's probably been up
for many hours
not even ready to settle in...
Yet I am ready to start my day...
We are two people
as different as the times of day
that bring us to life
yet I am drawn to her
like the owl
to the cool of the dark night...
But I can never reach her...
The breeze sweeps through
grazing my eye
bringing forth a tear
and I know that today
will be another day
when I will just want to sleep
be just like her...
a flower
that blooms best at night...
Maybe then we can be together...
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Author notes
Last night (well...this morning...it WAS 6:00 AM...) as I was going to bed, I thought about the guy i like and i could just imagine him waking up at 6:00 in the morning naturally and i decided to write a fictional piece from his point of view talking about loving me and imagining what I'm doing at that moment...
(I miss him, i need something to fantasize about...)
by the way, i might be doing a second part to this from my point of view, so watch out for that 
kayla*
Written July 17th, 2003
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Beautifully Described
This is really beautiful. the subtle rhymes and words you use make me feel like I just woke up. You do such a great job at describing the mood of the place, excellently done! of all the poets on this site you are one of the better! I read your poems cause I acctually enjoy them, and not cause I'm bored! -
very good
really enjoyed this write. -
very well written piece...with good imagination..hopeful love i like it...well done
keep up the good work
dark search -
great write!!!!! it was so romantic! i love fantasizing!!!!! it's so much fun!!! and painted a beautiful picture. though most of the guys i met would be thinking about sports..... they're just stupid like that!!!! lol! j/k! great job though! i absolutely loved reading it!!!
~mags~ -
or playing his violin...which would be equally good
(he doesn't strike me as the type that would like to watch baseball, but I DO know he watches soccer...so maybe that )
and I actually live in Canada...where are you from Woodworm?
kayla* -
He won't be thinking this, of course. He will be thinking of the Ball Game, or whatever they call it in the US. Or beer. But hey - you write angelically.
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We all need something to fantasize about, Kayla. Just don't get so wrapped up in the dreams that it causes you to miss out on all the fun and experince that comes with growing up.
I hope you know I am not being judgemental... because you know I spend a good deal of time in dream land too. 
Love you, girl.
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welll for fiction it was very well done. kind of hard to nail people's emotions so perfectly (even in your fantasies) especially from the other side. i liked this.... mostly because of the longing to be together. maybe that has a hidden reason of its own... DAMN ARMY! anyways great write. i enjoyed reading this very much.
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lovely
thats beautiful i love it its romantic i have love poem too"i love you"but i guess your poem so romatic i love to read it
gasel -
Ahhhh
Loved this one
Wish I could come up with something like this
Only you can do it so nicely sis
Ummmm love
I think I have forgotten what that feels like
Glad you haven't
Come see your sis
Luv ya
Susan~~~~
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Awwww. You really have talent with words. This is a very sweet, well written, cute poem. Keep it up!
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What a beautiful fantasy piece. It is hard to be separated from the one we love by distance. I am assuming you are living in different time zones maybe ? You should go ahead and write this from your point of vieuw too ...and maybe in the second part use " A breeze " rather then "The breeze " It makes it a bit less repetitive from the first line <----just a suggestion . And happy belated b'day
Reenie
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a very imaginative piece...but i'm not exactly sure who "she" is....and yes i to have thoes days where all i want to do is sleep
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Hun, we ALL need something to fantasize about! LOL
Sweet write. Keep it up
!~*YS4e*~!
Scarlett
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