You asked, I denied
You brightened, you replied
We got along, for a while
You said no matter, we reconciled
Then you discovered, I protested
You brought a witness, she contested
I looked down, you held head high
I stammered, you goodbyed
Author notes
This is my reason for honesty: the alternative will always come back to bite you.
And it's not meant to be about a guy cheating, although I suppose it could apply.
At 8 lines and 42 words, this is easily the shortest poem I have ever written. Enjoy.
A contest entry
- Perhaps, Perhaps, Perhaps.... by Wrendered.
318 points, ended April 30, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shorter The Better! by My Darkness.
400 points, ended July 4, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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so far, I have enjoyed all of the poems you have written, that's why I keep commenting.
in this one, I like that you give a play-by-play list of events. a good narrative.
-Pap.
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is goodbyed a word? ...interesting write, the rhyme was a bit off, and it took away the flow.. but overall the message is strong.. great job and thanks for entering
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Very Nice
Short, Sweet, Very To The Point. The Only Thing I Would Change Is The Fact That You Brought A Third Party Into The Poem. But I loved How It Was Written, And I look forward to reading more of your work.
May Your Pen Be Blessed!
:Wren:
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Thanks a lot for your input. But I don't think I'm going to change having a third party - in my experience that's usually the only way the other person finds out.
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