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Through the years

The young child filled with innocence,
Grows into an adult filled with guilt.

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a two-lined poem

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  • PrettyRagDoll
    April 30, 2007

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    Sad.

    Although depressing, I am sure this is true. I already feel the weight on my shoulders, and I am only 19. Too bad the young sometimes never get their chance at innocence, and adults sometimes never feel guilt when they should. Thank you for sharing.
    -BabyBear


  • RhiannonMari
    April 17, 2007

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    is guiltiness a word? beautiful sentiment, and the title does it justice. perhaps could have been just as well just to say filled with guilt. no need to even partly rhyme to make a point. nice!


    • Flying-Flamingo13
      April 17, 2007
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      yeah, i guess i didn't think about just using guilt... i think i will change it! Thanks!

      • RhiannonMari
        April 17, 2007
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        no problem. just giving my opinion! good luck in the contest! *smiles*