My life is like a T.V
it's told in black and white
the view desturbs the mind
it's on so late at night
my past is like a nightmare
it wakes you in a sweat
it leaves me with this feeling
that my souls the devils debt
they could make a fucking movie
and call it in my name
they can tell you of my past
that soaked my heart in pain
it can tell you how the drugs,
took away my dreams
and how the streets outside
had me living with no means
they can tell you how I walked
with fear by my side
and how my heart got hurt
that day my blood line died
but they can say I felt
in every line I said
and this rhyme will say I lived
when I become the dead
Please tell me what you think
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You have so many lines that you have penned telling the world the truth jsut like you said paul and so the story goes and the street poet keeps it sane when the world around you falls deep into the insanity ....called it life. Brilliantly said my friend.*
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Booshank
Absolutely bloody brilliant mate. I love the idea of a black and white TV, it conjures up so many different images. (I may have to use that idea in one of my future songs
) One part I feel could use some work
"they could make a fucking movie
and call it in my name
they can tell you of my past
that soaked my heart in pain"
You've got a cliche and an expletive in there for no reason.
Perhaps:
They could make a silent movie
and call it in my name.
The story of my past
in picture, frame by frame.
Just an idea.
The rest of the piece flows perfectly. Well done.
Dan
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wow this is good
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As former risk engineer Indira Singh of the JP Morgan Bank unveiled after having involuntary become involved with the FBI after she came across certain dubious transactions between individual suspected to be related with terrorist organizations and bank and government officials, said: The funding of covert activities of the intelligence community is drugs. The government pretends to be waging war against drug, but it is its main source of income to finance concealed operations. It is no different in other countries than it is in the USA. And like always is the case, the poor people in the streets suffer from these white collar crimes. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
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I like this rhyme very much, the rhythm is awesome in telling the tale with heart.
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