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you asked me "why are you doing what you are doing?"
i said " because i am me and not you."

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  • hazydreams
    May 8, 2007
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    lol very funny. Like the two liner alot.


  • PoetryDove
    April 30, 2007

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    Well, I like this. Very funny, catchy, and an interesting two liner. "Because I am me and not you" is very true and a great line. For some reason I am drawn to this...like I said, awesome! This is very cool....great job and nice work!
    Good luck
    ~Poetrydove~


  • PrettyRagDoll
    April 30, 2007

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    hmm...

    Well, it certainly makes the reader think. I liked the way you force the reader to see the difference between people's lives, actions, and motivations, all in two lines.
    -BabyBear


    • denika
      May 1, 2007
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      thank you... for the comment and a different view on my writings.


      *Denika


  • Vicky Shwepps
    April 30, 2007

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    oooooo, goood one! i love it, so many time people ask why im doing what im doing...and ill have to tell them that. lol well done. thanks for the comment btw.

  • Rajaram
    April 20, 2007

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    Neat little poem dear. Keep it up. Very plain and simple and very powerful. I would be happy, if you would stamp your impressions on my poems.


    • denika
      April 23, 2007
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      no problem i will take a look at your poetry.

      k?

      *denika


  • Samantha-.
    April 17, 2007

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    this is pretty good. it said so much with so few words. i wish i could say this to someone i know. great write.


  • ChildeOfChaos
    April 17, 2007
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    Short and simple, but simply wonderful. Such truth in your two lines. Good luck in the contest.


  • RhiannonMari
    April 17, 2007

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    i think it might be better, in my opinion, if you did either one of two things in that first line....

    either change the question to why are you doing what you are doing, rather than that you are doing...

    or... change to why are you doing that which you are doing.

    either or would be fine. perhaps the way you put it has meaning to you. just a thought. aside from that, i like it! we each do our own things.

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