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Rose

Can you not see me? I'm not ok.
Inside, I'm damaged beyond repair.
I try to help you in my own way.
I want to prove just how much I care.
In this wonderland, I am dying
and I don't want you to understand
just how much it is that I'm crying.
All I need is someone's open hand.
Just like a child, the nights are scary
when you're by your self and all alone.
There isn't very much that scares me
but now I can feel fear in my bones.
Fearing that soon, you're going to leave me
and you'll just be there till I shatter.
My eyes are open yet I can't see
proof in this world that I matter.
Can no one hear me? I am still here!
Cold and alone my soul is breaking!
I can see in your eyes and in your tears
you cannot hear the bells as they ring.
Will no one catch me as I'm falling?
I will not break. To you I'm a man.
What's wrong with me? What are you drawing?
I try to stop this as best I can.
I try to cast away the world's scorns.
Yet somehow, all of my pain still shows...

I feel my skin punctured by rose thorns...

Why can I not hold on to your rose?

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Just a poem I wrote for a friend that I never see anymore...

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  • SweetSins
    April 17, 2007

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    great writing:)

    Well I thought it was very creative. Nice emotion, similies, and metahpors. I love the last line especially. Keep writing
    -AiR