Her sweet, lonely tears fall down in the gutter.
As she searches the streets for someone who loves her.
Her one friend,
now held close to her heart.
An old, tattered teddy bear,
keeping her from falling apart.
Her feet now blistered and worn.
Her clothes ripped and torn.
Looking for food, warmth, and shelter.
Or just someway she won't have to worry any longer.
The ones who used to love her.
Brought her into this world.
Kicked her out on the street.
To face life alone, the only one in the world.
An inncoent little girl, the age of five
Now homeless and lost, wants to be alive.
As the clouds cover over,
the rain begins to pour.
She continues to wander.
Searching for something more.
The rain falls upon her, she doesn't seem to mind.
Shes soaked and shes wet, and life begins to rewind.
Inturupted by screams in the distance.
What becomes of people, when they loose their existence.
She looks over her shoulder, hearing the sirens.
Running from those flashing lights,
Into the crowds of people gathered around them.
In the meantime dropping her teddy bear down to the ground.
As this running and screaming continues all around.
A shot in the background, a few more cries.
As most of the people say their goodbyes.
She hides by the dumpster.
In the smelly, dark corner.
The only one who can fit, for once she wants people to ignore her.
Trying to control her sobs,
hide from the people and all those mobs.
She gasps for breath when she relizes she has lost her friend.
Returns to the street to find him again.
Then the streets get dark, shes alone once more.
Searching for the one she adores.
The one who helped her though those lonely nights.
Or days like this, with all these firghts.
Her sweet, lonely tears fall down in the gutter.
[with her teddybear]
and the ones that loved her.
Author notes
Option #11.
I don't usually write stuff liek this. But this picture made me think of a lonely homeless little girl. and i just ahd to write about it. This probaly isn't what your looking for, but I would respect if you stil lread it and liked it for what it IS about. =]
*MEgan*
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"Her sweet, lonely tears fall down in the gutter.
As she searches the streets for someone who loves her.
" is my favorite part good luck -
so sad and full of emotions!
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Typos with 'innocent', 'lose' and 'interrupted'.
I like the idea of the homeless girl, but the teddy bear itself is cliche, a teddy is frivolous, perhaps something that emphasizes her situation? A shirt that belonged to her mother (who she would love regardless)? A tobacco box of her father's? Just something that a child wouldn't normally care for, but that matters to this girl purely for the solace that it represents.
I wanted your syllabl;e counts to be a little more regular at times, as this is the rhyme is halting and uncomfortable to read where the lines are too long, though otherwise the poem is lovely.
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awwww this was such a sad write and was such a tear jerker..its so sad to think that actually is little girls out there thrown on the street
your talented keep writting
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This is so sad but i really like it darling. lol good job. well written THE BOMB.
sarah.....
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Wow
This really was sad! I don't mind you didn;t fit an optnio, thankyou for entering anyway, it was a good idea. I loved the imagery used here, it was really well done. Thanks for entering anf best of luck =]
Frankie xXx
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