This my abuse
My candy coated {noose}
This hell is my heaven
Won’t stop till I’m smaller then a 7
The X-poison-X will come out
This time there is no doubt
Can you feel my pain at all?
This
will
mark
my
fall
This beautiful deception
My ^lethargic^ interception
Heartlessly {{screeching}}
The bondage is seeping
Returning to this _-_-_maze_-_-_
[[Wondering]] through this haze
I’m l-o-o-s-i-n-g , ,
The result of this dead soul
My plastic scars
Putting me behind //bars//
Taking a ride on the porcelain express
I do this in excess
Even when I dont want to this is what I'll do
You tell me that I'm wrong I just scream
"FUCK YOU"
Life’s not all it’s cracked up to be
♥s and st*rs and colorful sights to see
A few more times and you won’t cease
I’ll never have this kind of peace
I’ll get to the size I want to be
I’ll get there eventually
That size zero is in sight
But I know this is a fight
{{{Black nail polish, glamour, and fame}}}
Put my head down in suffocating shame
This *shit* that I put my body through
It’s not right for me or you
I know that you don’t understand
You think this thing is out of hand
You’re my friend and I love you a lot
But this thing it’s not gonna stop
I wish you happiness in any other way
But I guess now I just don’t care what you say
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Author notes
[Pain is beauty]
and... Beauty is pain
The Artist FKA Gun
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wow, simply phenomenal! ^-^ Very interesting write and quite powerful as well. =] truly wonderful piece. Awesome write.
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the rhyming in this was great, and the form your put this into really captured my attention... the rhyming seemed to get a little repetitive... but its almost like it grew on me as i read on.
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wow i think this poem was truely amazing i loved the form and words you used great work sweetie, i really do wish you had put your ap name in the a.n as i asked in the rules though but all the same amazing poem keep it up...xxxxx
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It was interesting. The ryhming for me seemed a tad bit forced. Don't get me wrong, it was a good poem and I did like it. I'm just not in all a big fan of it, that's all.
It did flow reasonably well and it was interesting. You worked it rather allright, somethings seemed a bit misplaced or forced, but it was good.
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v nice, good luck x
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"...I just don’t care what you say".
You can not imagine how numbing those words are in this or other such similiar situations, even if they are not spoken.
But I suppose those of us that dont understand need to be hurt so we can leave those we love to their own demise.......right ?
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I dont exactly know but I do know that usually I wont listen to somebody unless they go through the same thing... you know what I mean?
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That doesnt mean that the people you tell to "shut the fuck up" (and thats pretty much what you are saying)do not suffer with you.
Pain comes from all sorts of mediums, but it all feels the same, it hurts.
Just because I dont have a knife sticking out of my chest doesnt mean I cant empathize with the bullethole in my back.
But I guess being stubborn is what being human is all about.
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i really like this poem it flows really good and I also love the way that you wrote it is awesome!!! love love ya lots babe!
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Gorgeous
This is so breath-takingly sad and gorgeous. Excellent write, my dear. You even made it rhyme! I'm thoroughly impressed. <3
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Oo!
Dirty pretty horray! Differnt to all other entries I've seen so far so well done on that one =] Really good expression of a lot of things here, I loved it! Thankyou for entering and best of luck =]
Frankie xXx
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Chrissy! I lovems it! Its sooooo good! I love it! I love the wording and the way it flows! Oh and I love the ryming! I love it lots!
Huggles and Clappy hands!
Muah!
luv ya!
♥ Natalie
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