I undo vagueness,
pushing away the webs of
yesteryear. To lunge forward,
awed by billowed dreams that dress
me warmly and tuck in my shirt.
Beauty, holds my hand,contemplating
the entrance of renewed life.
The changes take place quickly,
like water... replenishing itself;
a waterfall, bathing me clean. Purified.
To Be, as I breathe in deeply,to a
most exquisite fragrance.
The present takes a leap of faith,
as I become one with everything,
as oppose to being all to nothing.
Once I chose vagueness, but confusion became
territorial. The blur hid the truth,layers upon
layers of denial. Soon, my request revealed as the
veiled lifted...a new chapter.
To now lose myself in the melody of song, the
laughter of a child and...the embrace of love.
A contest entry
- The Clouds by Heart Sutra.
525 points, ended April 27, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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such a contemplative and soft write. the imagery is lovely and so well written into your verses with a solid flow. though - I'm not so sure that you need the formatting with the "..." in between some of your words. I kept reading those thoughts without much of a pause as though those "..."s were not there.
this really is a strong piece of poetry and written tightly. - well done!
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You'r right about the " ". Smile, so I removed them. I'm glad you liked my write.
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This reads and feels like a wonderful meditation. I could hear this one as much as I could read it. Perhaps you might consider a book of poetic meditations because I naturally find this element in your work everytime I read one of your sweet poems full of life and spiritualism all at once...into transcendence.
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Loved the ending of this poem - the clarity is now here - how love can change the cloudy nothingness and make it so distinct and fine is a wonder.
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment.
LL
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Beautifully Penned!
A well worded piece, so wonderfully expressed. It drew me in with each passing line, very good write indeed! Thanks for sharing. All the best in the contest as well my friend. Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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STUNNING WRITING!!!
STUNNING WRITING HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHAT MORE CAN I SAY. THE USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE HERE IS OUTSTANDING. I AGREE, IT IS THOUGHT-PROVOKING, BUT WRITING SHOULD BE LIKE THAT. WONDERFUL
WAYNE
KEEP WRITING
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so lovely. easy to read and follow along. the feelings/thoughts are something many people can relate to. good luck in the contest. was well worth the read.
blu
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This is a thought provoking write. Well done in respect to structure and flow. The image is wonderful, you have depicted a cloudy and vague image vividly and clear. Well done.
Love,
Amera
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