Were all those times we spent together
[wrapped up in our champagne wishes and caviar dreams]
Just a dream?
Or were they something much deeper?
[My ♥ calls out to you in this time of confusion]
As I pierce my neck with a needle-thin spike
I wonder what real love must feel like
[since you forgot to teach me]
[My love is anything but an illusion]
7,6,5,4 and I’m all over you
3,2,1 and I’m having fun!
[♥]
Author notes
i chose the title option.
i hope you enjoy my entry!
PlasticPrecious
A contest entry
- UnderMy[[Skin]]JustAn~I.t.c.h~ by MelissahhMidnite.
454 points, ended April 26, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
kinda short, but oh well...
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Great yet confusing to me. But you know that I am very easily confused so yeah...damn...i wish i understood it more so that i could leave a better comment. Lol!
♥♥
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J09 - Your Westside buddy! -
I most definitely love the song Don't Cry Out by Shiny Toy Guns, using their line at the end made this poem awesome :]
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[wrapped up in our champagne wishes and caviar dreams]
i love that line! -
Love it doll, that is amazing!!!!
You are such a great poet!!!
Love love the ending, Its very sweet,and bitter at the same time
As I pierce my neck with a needle-thin spike
I wonder what real love must feel like
[since you forgot to teach me]
These are my favorite lines!!!
You have great depth dollie pie!!!
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i love the beginning.
this is how i feel right now about my exxx.
[except i don't think he knows it]
good luck in teh contest.
you have an amazing piece here.
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Brother, darling, this is amazing! Seriously, you are one great poet! Good luck in the contest you should win.
Love you lots!♥♥♥♥♥♥
Chelsea
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It's very creative. Shows true emotion.
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awesome
great write
i love the theme
the word art kicks ass
quick off the mark! lol
thnx love you for adding the options choice
your a real doll
good luck
cookies&&[love]
xXintimateXx
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