In the rain I stand
So that no one sees my tears
Ashamed of who I am
And haunted by my fears
Lost in endless nothing
There I stand alone
Not a human but a something
My fire passion grows
Ever lasting anger
Kept here deep inside
Running from the danger
That's looking for a ride
Rain now pouring harder
It's difficult for me to see
I must go a little farther
To find out what's in me
Puddles splash with each step I take
Could staying in the rain
Have been a mistake?
Is this water or is this pain?
Shivering from the coldness
The mighty winds blow strong
Stubborn with my boldness
A fighter all along
Lightning bolts of fury
Fire down from up above
Thunder following in a hurry
Sounding oh so rough
Drenched with drops of sadness
Caused that by my pain
Going into madness
Caused by the pouring rain
A contest entry
- EMOTIONS - hit me with your best shot! by Heavens Child.
510 points, ended April 21, 2007, 51 entries
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360 points, ended October 10, 2008, 27 entries
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Wonderful imagery and flow and rhyming...your words are amazing, there seems to be a deeper message here, well done. If you stay in the rain long enough, eventually it may wash away your pain. Excellent write!!
Wyatt xxx
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"Running from the danger that's looking for a ride", I love the way you've worded that. You've done a fantastic job with the imagery of the storm. Excellent write. Good luck and thank you for the entry in my contest.
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I love it mom!!! I know you'll do well in the contest.
meg
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Very emotional Daughter! We want to see your tears, not for joy but for support. Good job of writing, good luck in the contest!
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i like this...very emotional...ryhme(sp?) scheme(sp?) is done excellently...nice job. Keep up the great work.
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