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~Fields of Forever~

 

 

 

 After all these years,
I still gasp
when I hear him
pull up and park.

I gaze through the glass,
see him sitting
for a second
in the truck,
tense and tired,
squeezing fingers
over his forehead.

He slowly slides out,
reaching a strong arm
across the seat.
Sweat soaked shirt
clings to his chest,
greasy, grimy jeans,
marred and marked
from the long day.
Dust covered boots
hit the driveway
with determination.

I watch him walk to me,
worn out, weary from work

...with wildflowers...
held in his hands,
rough and rugged
hard-working hands.

The door opens
and the only thing I see
is the soft side
of this sweet man’s soul.

He leans to me and says,
“These buttercups
were breathless
to see your beauty
and the daisies
were dancing lonely,
longing to be
hugged by
a lovely lady.”

Tears spilled

through smiles
of sincerity and security.

Love and romance
isn’t all wine and roses.
It’s wildflower whispers,
hand-picked,
from fields of forever.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

5. Write about a true love. Someone who is in your life that you know you could not live without. Someone who inspires you to go out and do what you want to do and who helps you with every little thing possible. That one person that you know you want to be with for the rest of your life. Tell me what he/she does for you and to you. Don't hold back, write everything you feel. ---Happy Birthday darlin'!

Option 6 - Your partner

.

Write a love poem to your partner, tell them how you feel

OR
Write how you met ? Was it something funny? Something organised?

1) Are you madly, crazily, insanely in love? tell me about it. how you met, what you've done, how he/she makes you feel, whatever. But here's the catch. if you make me genuinely want to cry, then THAT's what I'm looking for. I'm in a pretty "awww" worthy relationship right now, so good luck!

Option #3 Tell Me what True Love means to you.

2. A love poem but not a normal one, give me something different, special and exiting.


True story. Love really is grand!

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  • forever and ever
    July 9, 2007

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    wow. this was really good! you really have a talent! keep up the great work and good luck in the contest.


  • Asylaarix
    July 5, 2007

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    Wow this is in a lot of contest ... and it's gotten many awards ... very impressive ... my main focus though is on the poem ... not the contests ... and I do have to say ... this is one heck of a love story ... amazingly beautiful ... stunning ... charming ... sweet ... and yet a little seductive ... I too have a love like this ... and it's absolutely amazing ... you have penned yourself one hell'a write here ... well done

    Much Luv
    Smile, it confuses people
    Sparkeh


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    July 1, 2007
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    -Ink Artist-,

    First off, Thank you very much for your entry in my contest =]

    Second, This is completely beautiful ... There is no other word except 'Beautiful' to describe this write. The love just flows so fast off this page and makes the readers smile

    Excellent !
    Best of luck =]
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda

  • restful.soul
    June 21, 2007
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    BEAUTIFUL!

    this poem brought tears to my eyes! oh how we all wish to be loved like this! it truly is the little things in life that truly matter eh? well done i have entered you into my finalists list which means that even if you do not win, you will be invited back for the second round of this contest x thankyou and good luck
    peace


  • Florida Sunshine
    June 18, 2007

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    aaaaaaaaaaaah, this is a beautiful write! .... Dang you clearly show this is what LOVE is all about! GREAT JOB! Good luck in the contest!


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    June 16, 2007

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    the imagery in this is quite fantastic. i could see him pulling up, parking, getting out of the truck. all of my senses were alert, even smell, as i read what you have written. you are quite right, this is love and romance, not all of the candles and mush. daily appreciation of what one is/has/works to be is true love in my estimation. thank you for making that so clear in this write. my favourite part was: Love and romance isn’t all wine and roses. It’s wildflower whispers, hand-picked, from fields of forever. you did a fantastic job and i wish you well in the raven qualifier. viyanna rosemarie


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 11, 2007

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    The cream of poetry...brought tears to my eyes, This is a true masterpiece and well wroth the trophy's it has won Thank you so much for sharing and entering


  • arafura gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    wow...

    Very romantic! Do such men exist? I must admit I've met one... or looked at one in the mirror!

    Good luck in the contest!


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    May 30, 2007

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    This is realy nice I enjoyed reading it.
    Nothing reflects Love like a Beautiful bunch of flowers.
    Thank you for your entry Good Luck in the Contest


  • cookie crumbs
    May 16, 2007

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    Dang it all! I LOVED it!! unfortunately if you had read the rules you would have seen that I said no prewrites that had already won trophies. I'm sorry but you are DQ - great write though.


  • girl-in-the-vintage
    May 11, 2007

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    This is beautiful. I love the way it tells such a simple story, yet one so full of happiness and contentment. I love it! Well done and Good Luck <3


  • Ryno
    May 10, 2007

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    This is quite an inspiring and simple write that explores the depths of romance to different extremes. Everything was worded with power and praise for such emotion. Highly sentimental write. Thank-You for your great entry in Prewrites!
    ~Ryan~


  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 29, 2007

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    WEll already read this but was glad to come back and enjoy it once again and smile in my own memories of love coming back home!


  • zochit2me gold member
    April 29, 2007

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    You make love sound so lovely. I want a love like this...does he got brothers?...Seriously You ROCK! You imagery throughout this was just beautiful and the last line just blew me away. A wonderful enchanting read here. Thank you for sharing it with me.
    Becky


  • hazeleyedfreak
    April 26, 2007

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    I can tell you love your significant other very much and he loves you. This is a beautiful write. I can tell that the emotion is love, lol. My favorite lines are,"
    Love and romance
    isn’t all wine and roses.
    It’s wildflower whispers,
    hand-picked,
    from fields of forever

    I like how you say that love is not just the big glorious things but the simpler and smaller things too. Good Job. Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • ShelleyA gold member
    April 25, 2007
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    A beautiful write and presentation. Lovely depth of feeling. Love shines in this piece, from the writer and from the man who holds her heart. Excellent imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Strong alliteration and good assonance. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read. Congratulations on winnin Bronze. Well deserved.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 25, 2007
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    Did comment on this before you added it to the realding list I think. Still takes one's breath away...


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 24, 2007

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    i would like to wish you the best of luck in this contest we both have entered. you have written this well. viyanna rosemarie


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks so much, Viyanna! Your well wishes are most appreciated. Congrats on winning HM in this contest! I hope to stop by and read your winning piece this morning.


      ~Lori


  • Amber Face
    April 23, 2007
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    I love this poem. It is absolutely amazing.


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks so much, Amber. Happy you enjoyed this romantic write.


      ~Lori


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    April 22, 2007

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    3 claps...9pts

    The Poetic Bandits

    ~Lilac


  • ckwriter69
    April 22, 2007

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    Wow I'm so impressed with this write. It is truly one of your best Lori, So well versed and with a heartfelt love that only comes from reality. Way to go little sis. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
    CK


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks Charley! I really appreciate your wonderful comment, big bro!


      ~Lori


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    April 22, 2007

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    Impressive...

    Oh gosh!! I'm sighing, you really know how to make a reader of your work sigh...this is a heavenly write, you are so lucky to have such closeness of love in your life...and they say men are not romantic...no wonder you can't wait for his return from work

    A really touching poem penned affectionately, to give a lovely image...engaging, enchanting, excellent Pretty border too, soft and tender, perfect for your poem...

    Love and smiles
    ~Lilac

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks Lilac! I'm glad you enjoyed this romantic piece. It's easy to write about when it's been experienced. I appreciate your lovely comment!


      ~Lori

  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 21, 2007
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    Aww how sweet and what a great tribute, isn't love just great, especially when, seasoned by years, it still manages to make one feel it! As always form you, a gerat poem well written and very easy flow, complimenting the poem along with the BG.Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks Peg! I'm happy you enjoyed this romantic write! Much appreciated.


      ~Lori


  • real irish rose
    April 21, 2007

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    Lori this is really beautiful and such a sweet feeling of love overcame me as I read this, it is clear to the reader how you feel about this man so this is just beautiful !!
    As always my friend indeed a pleasure to read...julie


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks so much, Jules! I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this romantic piece! Much appreciated!


      ~Lori


  • ronnica
    April 18, 2007
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    Its wildflowers and whispers,
    and Lori's poetry.
    Sigh!


  • Lady Altheia
    April 18, 2007

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    awwwww, this is beautiful. I love getting flowers. The words are perfect. It is the little things that count.


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thank you, Lady Altheia! I'm so happy you enjoyed this romantic piece.


      ~Lori


  • blondone
    April 18, 2007

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    Oh my what romance indeed these are the things that make Love grow and grow and a true story you are so very lucky..Love this write written so sofly touches of love dripped all over it this is entirly beautiful...


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks so much, blondone! Your sweet words are much appreciated.


      ~Lori


  • Twinstar
    April 18, 2007

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    Wonderful!!!

    This is a beautiful poem. Tears came to my eyes while reading this. How lucky in love you both are. Sounds as though he is poetic as well. This touched my heart. I loved it!
    Love & Light
    Debbera


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 24, 2007
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      Thanks so much, Debbera! Your lovely comment is most appreciated!

      *hug8
      ~Lori


  • soulfultia gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    "Sigh"...well mission accomplished. I want one of those! Do I have to travel North to find him? Very good, very sweet and just carries you through on a breeze. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest girl! ~Tia

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thanks Tia! Much appreciated hon! If I find another one like him up here, I'll hold him and call ya! Love ya darlin'.


      ~Lori


  • Desire gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    Precious!!

    Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaw Danggggggg
    Precious verse You have penned my Friend
    How can one not resist a rare Gem like that...
    You are so Blessed and so is he so heck...
    makes the world a better place to live in...
    I'm Blessed with my hubby and we continue to smile spreading Love and Light
    which You both do by being so darn Happy
    Did I make sense just now

    Thank You for Blessing me again with this Priceless piece

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thanks so much, Desire! Glad you enjoyed this piece and wonderful to know you have a sweetie like this, too!


      ~Lori


  • Frozentearz
    April 17, 2007

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    Awwwwwww this was so Dam sweet,
    and full of great expressions of love,
    A tender story shared with us,
    So wonderful and touching,
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thanks honey! Much appreciated! Thanks for noticing the typo, too! I read and re-read and never noticed it!


      ~Lori


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    WOW!

    Sis, this is breathtaking!
    I can feel the love and smell the wildflowers while reading your words...I agree with the comment below.....This one made me cry too..
    Beautifully done!

    Big sigh~

    Lynda

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thanks for the sweet comment, sweet Sister! I'll take those daisies and buttercups he stopped by the road and picked over roses any day. It's true what they say, it's the thought that counts.


      ~Lori


  • WolfHeart
    April 17, 2007

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    I am crying so ...

    Oh, this is beautiful, beautiful and the essence of romance and love - love is also going to work at a dirty job and working hard to support one's family - and not taking out his hardships of the day on you. You are so blessed and you wrote a brilliant poem that is love personified.

    love, Auntie Wolfie (your biggest fan)

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thank you so much for the lovely comment, Auntie! Love isn't all satin and lace and candlelight around here. Like you said, it's going to work everyday at a filthy job to put food on the table. When he comes home with a handful of flowers that he took time to stop and pick by the roadside, it means more than a $100 bouquet of roses any day.


      ~Lori


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    "I watch him walk to me,
    worn out, weary from work

    ...with wildflowers...
    held in his hands,
    rough and rugged
    hard-working hands."

    Awww, how sweet...how utterly adorable... Heyyy...does he happen to have an older brother??? Beautifully penned, my Friend...You're a lucky woman...but from reading of this man's devotion & sweetness, I imagine he'd say HE'S the lucky one...Good luck in Lynda's contest, Sweetie...It's lovely... Wanda

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thanks Wanda, for your wonderful comment! It is most appreciated! Sadly, he doesn't have any brothers, only sisters. I think we're both quite lucky to have each other and I don't want it any other way!


      ~Lori


  • oldmanriver1942
    April 17, 2007
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    So Sweet!

    very good write..Romance comes in many forms


    • -Ink Artist-
      April 18, 2007
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      Thank you so much, my friend! Your sweet comment and applause are appreciated.


      ~Lori

  • grannyeri gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    What a marvellous thought ypu have left with us in that last verse - such a lovely read this was - especially out loud - leaves one with a lump in their throat and tears in their eyes or a smile on their lips - this is what poetry is about. Super....can't get much better than this. Loved it.


  • RazorbladeKissCasel
    April 17, 2007
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    O.o

    I like this poem i think it is really good...


  • Frogzter gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    This is stunning my friend! What glorious images in your words! Incredible penning! Loved this one to bits... Can see the flowers clearly and the love from the one handing them over to you!@
    Blessings,
    Frogz~

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 17, 2007
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      Thanks so much, Frogz! This was an easy write since it is a true story, but it's such a wonderful story to share. He's a rare gem! Thanks for reading, sweets!


      ~Lori


  • Endeavor gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    Excellent x2


    You may very well win with this
    We are always at our best when we write from life
    I hope this treasured man is still with you

    The ending moved me greatly

    Love and romance
    isn’t all wine and roses.
    It’s wildflower whispers,
    hand-picked,
    from fields of forever.

    WoW

    Rick

    • -Ink Artist-
      April 17, 2007
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      Thanks Rick! Most appreciated. Yes, he's with me and I don't plan on letting him go! Men like him are few and far between. Thanks so much for reading and your feedback!


      ~Lori

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