Resting in the far corner where the shadows hide
is the piano upon which many of my memories cried.
The keys we used to play as the world’s last duet
are torn and yell out along that old silhouette.
Your smile is still painted in each melody it plays,
in rapid harmony with my heart that is still in ablaze
by the soft touch you placed on my lips that never lost
a heartbeat in the tempo it kept playing in exhaust.
Still singing along that melody our hearts throbbed,
the words well from this soul that never once stopped
to love the angel sitting by it’s forgotten old side,
no matter how big a storm was again brawling outside.
In this last old solo, I shall sing my heart to pieces
until the pain and the sorrow once again increases.
Then I’ll play that one last note and collect my wings.
I’ll fly up there and permanently connect our strings.
© Janniina Hentilä
April 17, 2007
Author notes
Entry in the contest:
"Anything goes" by Snow White Queen
I was actually inspired by the picture on the contest page. I got a surge of inspiration and just wrote a poem before I even checked out what the contest was about... Good thing that it fit the category
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything goes by Beating.
450 points, ended May 1, 2007, 61 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think - be as bold as you can; I don't break.
Comments
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Hi too bad you didn't not put this in my figurative language contest. This is really excellent! The piano stands as a very strong symbol!
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When I finally did have time to read through the contest, it had already ended. It was a shame but such is life.
When it comes to this piece, I'm not completely satisfied with it, to be honest. I don't know why, but I only find the second stanza worth pride. But that's just me; I'm always the worst critique of myself.
Thank you for your kind words; they mean the world to me!
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this is beautiful! im not sure that i can offer any advice on how to make this better! very well done!
the sadness flows through it well....
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I'm glad the sadness was heared along with this piece. When I started writing this, I wasn't too sure if I wanted to, because I have a skill of destroying a good idea with a tacky outcome. I'm glad this didn't become one of the tacky ones.
Thank you for your kind words; they mean a lot to me!
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Congratulations on winning gold. This is a beautiful flawless poem that deserves it. Well done. James.
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Thank you so much for your words; they mean the world to me. I'm very glad that you like this
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I love this poem, it's flawless and beautiful...Great job!
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I'm glad you like it. Thank you for your words; they mean a lot
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this was a really beautiful poem i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful and beautiful..i also liked the metaphors that you used keep writting your talented
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I'm very very glad that you like this piece. Thank you for your kind words; they mean a lot to me
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WOW
Oh this is so beautiful, I'm in love with this piece! I am usually not a big fan of the whole rhyme thing, but this is just breath taking!
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