Dark desires live within me.
My dreams are full of passion.
My love for you burns too deep,
and must be hidden away.
Deep down, so no one will see.
Coldness overwhelms my soul.
A shiver of loneliness through me.
Longing for you, my dark desires,
that tear my soul to pieces.
Only you can make me whole.
We meet in my hidden dreams.
You touch me with such love.
You are my dark desires,
without you my heart bleeds,
my soul tears from the seems.
These feelings I want rid of,
end this growing misery.
Enter the light that entices.
Intoxicate my desires,
I will fly high above.
A contest entry
- 15 (DARK/SAD) TITLES >>> first come, first serve!!! by Rianna Bear.
600 points, ended April 28, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 649 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow this is amazing it is soo touching and just wow. it takes my breath way. I never thought i find a writer that can write like this great job!
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We meet in my hidden dreams.
You touch me with such love.
You are my dark desires,
without you my heart bleeds,
my soul tears from the seems.
babe, love the poem,
these are the lines that really got hold
of my eyes..love it keep up sweet..
*gina*
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i love it !!!
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this is good! a feeling most have been through, and you have written it so well. thank you for sharing in the reading list. best of luck in your contest!
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I really like this. It is sad but beautifully written. I like the flow and the descriptions of this piece. I feel like I can relate to this, wanting something so much that it hurts. Good luck in the contest and congrats on the one you have won.
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this was a great write...i really enjoyed reading this...your words were strong, powerful and emotional as well..this flowed well to keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
~Chrissy~ -
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I find your words to be very powerfull and even though you havent much ryhme it is still quite good. You did do a bit of repeating though. piece advice, use it only if you wish: dont use periods. I used to and ive been told they are quite out of place in poetry. Just a thought. Good job though
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VERY FULL OF DESIRE! I loved the feeling of the secrecy here, and the longing for something to make one whole, but the lack of the ability to actually be able to make it happen. nice job with the title and thanks for sharing
Rianna -
"Longing for you, my dark desires,
that tear my soul to pieces.
Only you can make me whole."
That is such an amazing line...this poem has so much emotion....its even beautiful for being so dark...Good luck in the contest!!!
♥Ashlee
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This is really good. You show very raw and dark emotion to us the readers of your great write. I wish you all the best in this contest. It flowed easily. Well done
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