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ღG*l*i*t*t*e*r*i*n*gღC.o.n.t.a.m.i.n.a.t.i.o.n.ღ

Cracked and cursed, |trapped| within eternal damnation,
Self-d|e|s|t|r|u|c|t|i|n|g| at the seams and damaged by soured lies.
Trapped in an alcoholic haze, I Peer through shotglasseyes,
Into a melody of g.l.i.t.t.e.r.i.n.g contamination.

Absorbed in a valley of poisonous rainbows,
Surrounded by the scent of m~o~r~p~h~i~n~e flowers with h-e-r-o-i-n petals.
Narcotic smiles d*a*n*c*e upon my candy lips,
In an attempt to escape these tragic sorrows.

A plastic wonderland crumbles beneath ink coloured skies,
As I'm !forced! to return to a f\r/a\c/t\u/r\e/d reality.
Left bruised and defiled in my b.l.o.o.d.y demise,
An unfortunate failed attempt at insanity.

Coral t*r*u*t*h flows from the vein,
As g~l~i~s~t~e~n~i~n~g silver lacerates the flesh.
Each affliction is like a !!rush!! of c.o.c.a.i.n.e,
I take in the high as I make my final wish.

Swollen eyes open to p-s-y-c-h-i-a-t-r-i-c /confinement\,
Body bound to a psych ward, imprisoned in this jacket.
Medicated and f~o~r~g~o~t~t~e~n, just another suicidal patient,

All alone I sit praying for a razor and wishing for a bullet♥.

Author notes

I wrote a poem that is about me it is about how i used drugs to escape memories of molestation and abuse..I wrote about cutting and suicde and i have been admitted to a psych ward for suicide and am a drug addict...so i hope this poem is good enough for your contest....and thanks for hosting this contest...

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  • holy shit this is amazing. Love it

  • Wow.... I cannot believe that you've been on the site for over two years (alomost...??) and I've not seen you around!

    Dirty pretty. Man, I love this style.

    And this write... It was raw, real, bruised yet beautiful.
    Excellent work, so hard to make something so personal mean something you want it to, or at least tell it;s own story...

  • shadsgirl
    October 23, 2007

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    wow i think that you are really talented its amazing i love your work keep it up


  • anemodisaster
    August 16, 2007
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    wow i love this poem it shows loads of feelings and emotion
    keep up the work


  • aeolia
    August 1, 2007

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    It's a bit hard to read with not only the font colours against the background, but with the excessive, unecessary punctuation. I will never understand the appeal of that.


  • Dancing Marionette
    June 1, 2007

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    I really, really like this. I like the different colors of it, and the way it just make certain words of it pop. I love how I can relate to using drugs to escape things in life, and the words that you used in this poem are just beautiful doll. And the background for this is gorgeous doll.

    plastic wonderland crumbles beneath ink coloured skies,
    As I'm !forced! to return to a f\r/a\c/t\u/r\e/d reality.
    Left bruised and defiled in my b.l.o.o.d.y demise,
    An unfortunate failed attempt at insanity.

    My favortie part of the poem it just seemed so wonderfull to me.

    coley


  • Atrophya
    May 25, 2007

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    Hmmm... I'm terribly sorry you had to go through all this, I know it must be rough. I hope you'll be okay.=]


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    May 23, 2007

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    Wow

    Now I really must say the very middle of this poem really got me:

    A plastic wonderland crumbles beneath ink coloured skies,
    As I'm !forced! to return to a f\r/a\c/t\u/r\e/d reality.
    Left bruised and defiled in my b.l.o.o.d.y demise,
    An unfortunate failed attempt at insanity.

    I love it! I am absolutely shocked at how incredibley deep of a poet you are espically when you talk about darkness that sadly is true for your life. It is sad that your past is so messe dup but at least you have a good future ahead of you and you are slowly recovering from all that. Very well penned though but sad because you went through all this. keep up the good work Signed, Paul


  • penman gold member
    May 22, 2007
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    Wonderful

    Really is so filled with dark and intense thoughts. Quite an amazing write.


  • Dead Star--x
    April 25, 2007
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    luv the updated picture ♥

  • Dead Star--x
    April 20, 2007

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    you put a lot of effort into the poem with the added affects which sometimes are a bit distracting but at other times really make certain words pop out at you, thanx for entering & good luck! ♥
    PrettyX


  • Inuyoukess
    April 19, 2007

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    Very beautifully dark descriptions, and great word choice. You have created a very dark and bleak atmosphere, good job!


  • LucyLightning
    April 19, 2007

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    Narcotic smiles d*a*n*c*e upon my candy lips

    I totally L-O-V-E-D this line. My totalllll favorite.
    Lovvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvved it woman! lol.


    [Faren]


  • PaintedParisPassion
    April 17, 2007

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    This was amazzzzing!!! seriously, it was so open, honest and full of raw emotion, you did an amazing job writing about your experience and how you feel about it all. Good luck in the contest, and i hope things get better for you!


  • autumns rising
    April 17, 2007

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    it must be hard to share such a personal account with strangers. This is amazing though. I never wrote dirty pretty before but it is unique and kick ass


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 17, 2007

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    Such beautiful writing Chrissy. We have all had those times in our lives that we both regret and yet enjoy remembering the feeling of just losing control... Sometimes that feeling takes us away from the real pains of life, but it doesn't last long so you have to take more to get more. Well illustrated and love the picture. Clever use of vocabulary and well done for putting all those options into one. Well done for a great write. I think you will win with this one, but ssh, just a suspicion.


  • MysticAngelEyes
    April 17, 2007

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    wow that was a very deep and dark poem so full of pain and anger. Very visid iamges ahve been painted. And the stly and background make it even more alluring. Great work.


  • Xx Morbid Beauty xX
    April 17, 2007

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    hey hun

    yet again another fantastic write... u used my background lol heheh jk lol hehe so yea ... i loved this poem ... i loved the format and context to it as welll keep up the great work...
    <3 krissy


  • lysdarling
    April 17, 2007

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    "Coral t*r*u*t*h flows from the vein,
    As g~l~i~s~t~e~n~i~n~g silver lacerates the flesh.
    Each affliction is like a !!rush!! of c.o.c.a.i.n.e,
    I take in the high as I make my final wish."
    >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>><<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<
    *these lines were my fav. gorgeous, my dear. i hope life has gotten betters. i'm at school so no time to comment but luck in this contest! i'd like to check out more of your work when i have time
    xoxo,
    -->lys


  • The Existentialist
    April 17, 2007
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    this was great. very powerful. nice job.


  • EatYourSunlight
    April 17, 2007

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    Ok, well i cant say im a fan of the style. but i like the realness there is. i mean, take away everything that makes the poem pretty, and you got something real deep and i can tell you been threw alot.
    xoxox keep writting. like the backround too


  • Andu
    April 17, 2007

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    I loved this. I have always been telling myself that i have yet to see a poem with all the {|*] symbols in it that I could read right through the end and enjoy, and this poem was it. The dirty pretty elements in it, were not overdone, and in fact they were very strategically placed.
    The poem was great too, so dark and yet, so passionate. Well written and a pleasure to read. Well done, impressive work!

  • xUnseenLovex
    April 17, 2007

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    Whoa, an astounding poem. A good use of creative language really draws the reader into the poem. I also really like the layout of the poem, and the certain words spelled with punctuation between each character gives a deeper meaning to the poem as a whole and emphasises the words in particular very well.
    Well Done,
    Keep It Up,
    Great Luck In The Contest,
    xUnseenLovex


  • XxMysticalFantasyxX
    April 17, 2007
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    oh yeah and applaud

  • XxMysticalFantasyxX
    April 17, 2007

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    Hey great poem looks pretty too lol sorry hun didnt mean to make it so short the first time lol its really good I really liked it it reminds me of older days if u catch my drift lols anyways this was really great

    P.S ENTER MY CONTEST I WANNA READ MORE lol

    Luv ya hun

    xoxo


    • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
      April 17, 2007
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      hehe ima gonna enter your contest tomorrow no worries hun and thanks for the applause and comment


  • requiempoet gold member
    April 17, 2007
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    Good job. It's a poem that packs a wallop! glad you could share.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    April 16, 2007

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    I have to say this looks like it took a fair while to get set out like that; Very interesting and uniquely done

    A deep and powerful write, hits people hard in the chest you are honest and that brings out the words stronger than they appear

    Very well done and great set up
    I wish you the BEST of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda

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