Your body slick with sweat,
I smell your fear.
I lick it off your fair skin.
You tremble so sweetly for me.
I caress your throat with the sweet-sliver blade.
A trickle of red rolls down toward your breast.
You whimper.
I'm aroused.
Oh to hear you cry for me.
"Soon enough", I whisper,"soon enough."
You open up to me,
and I move in, again and again,
thrusting as you moan and buck under me.
Till at last, I take my fill.
I lean in close,
my need to feel the soul
under my hand, around my blade,
over-whelmingly sweet,
enticing.
Where does it hide?
We will have to look and see.
See what you hide from me.
I search all the usual places,
messy and red.
But you shows me nothing.
False.
The dialation of the eyes,
the catch in the breath.
You quiver so sweetly,
Heart beat against the blade.
Its so swift, so fleeting
the moment I feel you passing.
"Good bye", I whisper as you go.
Then the moment is over.
Too quickly you become a 'thing',
another carcass to be tossed.
"How disappointing"I say,
to the now empty room.
I lick the blade clean,
staring into its dead eyes.
"What ever did I see in that thing?"
I see my prey,
my Precious.
She walks about with out a care.
Of course she's the One,
Can't you see?
All the other's where mere lies...
"Soon enough", I whisper,"soon enough."
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Serial Killer Special
I got a kick out of this and I am sure there are those out there that would be totally disgusted by this piece, for good reason because serial killers are scary to most and serial killer is what I get from this! It flowed nice enough and at places it sounded REAL good and it held a certain creepy feel befitting a serial killer, ESPECIALLY THAT ENDING!!!
Loved that ending!
In any case, as a work it could use a little better flow and the wording is pretty strong but it feels like something minor is missing that could really make this piece-just don't ask me what that is, ha.
Thank you for your entry!
Truly and Darkly,
Dirk
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hehehe, i'm holding the other half of this hostage...well, um...my dead computer is anyway...mwahahahahahahah
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wonderful work for this
Riftkin
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just.....WOW
I AM FUCKIN HALF ASLEEP (i just woke up) AND THIS BROUGHT ME RIGHT AWAKE! AN AMAZING, AMAZING PIECE! To no end. This is WONDERFUL, I MENA, I FUCKIN LOVE IT! It made me shudder, ESPECIALLY THIS/THESE LINES:
"You tremble so sweetly for me.
I caress your throat with the sweet-sliver blade.
A trickle of red rolls down toward your breast."
AND
"I lick the blade clean,
staring into its dead eyes.
"What ever did I see in that thing?"
CONGRATS! YOUR INT HE FINALIST
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The preditor's visions of my prey's experience!!! I love you Jeh!!!! XD rawr!
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This was awesome, keep up the good works. I look forward to reading more from you.
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hmm, this was quite delightful. Seriel killer, I'm guessing? Very intriguing. lol Great job, my brother
Shade
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