See the hitchhiker
living the beat
He runs towards the bar to
get out of the rain
Bars closed
this time of night
no luck for him again
He hears singing
in the distance again
louder this time
The rain has slackened
and the smell of ozone
is thick in the warm summer air
The hitchhiker walked on
beat worn shoes slapped on endlessly
as he walked up the dirt road
slipping on the muddy road
He creasted the hill
the music was coming
from a white clapbourd house
shouts came from inside
people tumbled out
After twelve years
living the Beat one the road
he was home.
Author notes
just popped out I guess
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A contest entry
- Inspire Me! Earth/Nature Poetry by iamlost.
600 points, ended April 22, 2007, 39 entries
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Comments
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The first three stanzas are nice, but I feel that some lines are needed to connect the thought in the poem, between 4th and 5th stanza. A great ending though, keep it. Nice write and keep on writing!
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I love the ending the hope and all
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again another really good beat poem
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I love the feelings in this piece of rejection, of grit and dirt and mud, of the rain pouring down and drowning out hope, yet hope is still heard and recieved. Great write, I'm glad this one "popped out", it was worth reading!
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