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Revolution

~Delilah~

Here I sit
So absent of mind
So lost in a world unknown
So distant

I weep
Crying my soul out for you
Bleeding my heart out for you
And what do you do?
You cut me up
You push me down
You spit on me
You make me bleed


What wrongs have I done?
What did I do to offend you?
I am just myself and you don't like me that way
You smile but inside you are hating me
You want me to be a different me
A person I cannot be

I sit in the waiting
Listening to the wind
My hair loose and blowing in the wind
And you approach
And you are concealing something
A weapon of some sort


I am fearful

I am afraid

I am the girl you want me to be

Afraid, worried, scared for her life

You need me to be weak

So you can feel strong

 

You touch my face and I pull back

You put your arms behind you

And the sounds of hatred whisper through the breeze

And you smile

I can hear you groping the trigger

 

Before me you stand
A revolver in hand

MY revolver in hand

You smile and mutter how pretty I look

 

Your voice is now gripped with hatred for me

And I only want to fight

I only want to live and to get my gun

Because that gun

That shiny silver revolver is my fight

It is my courage, my strength, my everything

My revolver is me

 

I rise quickly and demand he shoot me

He looks at me like I am pyscho

He laughs and says that neither of us will get out alive

Homicide/suicide

"Best way to be a coward!" I scream at him

 

He jumps back

Afraid to speak

He thought I was helpless without my gun

He thought I was dead weight

He thought I was useless

 

I grab MY gun back

And aim it at his head

He takes four steps back

He knows I will shoot

 

"Delilah, please, don't do this!"

"And why should I not? you were going to kill me

And kill you as well. Cute, ex-lovers in a homicide/suicide.

The cops will find it dashing, don't you think?"

"Delilah, put the gun down!"

"Darling, this is only your death,

I only want my life back."

"Delilah! Put the bloody gun down!"

 

~The Walls~

She cocks the gun

She knows it's loaded

It always is

She aims

He goes into panic

Afraid he will meet his doom at the hands of his ex.

 

She remembers a photograph she had seen days before

It was a suicider

A gun to it's head

And where blown out brains should have been

It was butterflies

 

The suicider was at peace

She believed it was a girl

She was free from her wretched hell

Her chains broken and her soul free

She was finally free

 

And as she pictured this

She pulled the trigger

And he collapsed

Blood gushed and brains spewed

 

What happened that night is not talked about

Only cried about

Hidden throughout

And scattered about

 

Check the floor boards

Check the walls

Check the ceiling

Check the halls

Whisper because the walls can hear

The walls truely do have ears

Careful what you say

Because these walls CAN talk

These walls can scream

These walls know things

That we can only dream

These walls have talked once before

And might just talk again

But beware of the spare house

Don't go near the spare house

For it's secrets are screaming

It's secrets are bleeding

And so are the walls as we sing

 

 

Author notes

It is darkness, but a light darkness. A believible darkness.
A true and forgoten darkness.

A contest entry

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  • creon
    August 9, 2007

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    grade a

    that was the shit. i can really see it going on. nice walls. and i like the name Delilah. also it was the best story i've read in years.


  • xandercheerios
    May 13, 2007

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    I like but I hate the line "I sit in the waiting". I can't explain why, but I do. Your lack of punctuation doesn't really affect the poem itself, but it would help with reading it outloud. To take breaths where you want the reader to breathe, to change voices when you want them to... Groping the trigger... don't like that wording. And it's psycho, not physco. And you missed the pluralization on "she knows it's loaded". In the last verse (which I like, for it's rhymes) it should be truly, not truely. Other than that, a beautiful dark poem

  • rozethorn
    May 6, 2007
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    hell yea!

    very dark. i like them that way though. it sounds like a book that i might read. very cool!


  • Death From Above
    April 24, 2007
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    AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!


  • Ethereal One gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    strong emotions

    You take the reader on a very emotional ride in this poem. I was hooked by the first few stanzas. You express how some men need to find fault with a woman in order for them to feel superior. This stanza says a lot:

    "I am fearful
    I am afraid
    I am the girl you want me to be
    Afraid, worried, sacred for her life
    You need me to be weak
    So you can feel strong"

    I like the air of mystery in the last part of your poem.

    Good luck in the contest!

    Ethereal Melody


  • coeurporcelaine
    April 17, 2007

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    I am the girl you want me to be

    Afraid, worried, sacred for her life

    did you mean "Scared" ? or is it supposed to be sacred?

    good read.
    rather Lengthy,

    But good.


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    awww that was soooooooo good Jess! I Loved it! not as much as I Love you of course! anyway Im sure youll win that contest!



    -Steve-(your SuperGeek SuperMan)


  • XxMysticalFantasyxX
    April 16, 2007

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    wow im deffinately speechless this poem was very amazing its like a horror movie very dark and just wow you are very talented!!!! thank you for entering and the best of luck

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