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Victoria

I cried when I came home today
I heard that you were gone
Your mother took you away
She broke our special bond

She told you that I'm not your dad
I know that isn't so
For it's the reason I'm so sad
I just want you to know

You are an angel on this earth
You're like blood to me
I may not have been there at your birth
Still no one loves you more than me

I hope that you'll forgive me
For waiting oh so long
But I didn't want to be
Your stepdad-was I wrong

No matter where your footsteps lead
I hope you're never sad
If there's ever anything you need
I will always be your dad

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i AM A GOOD PARENT

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  • moaner
    July 20
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    great write! Lots of emotion and raw feelings here. Thank you for entering and good luck x


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    July 18

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    I'm so sorry, I hate to hear of parents being torn from their children. I can tell that you loved your child because the emotion you put in this piece is outstanding. Very well done, thank you for entering.


  • Ti Amo Te Quiero
    May 13

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    So sorry to hear that, but glad to know it ain't that bad now. Very nicely written! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck !

  • piccola silver member
    May 8, 2008
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    My son is hated by all of his children because he has never been there for them. One is 19 and married ... the other is 18 and trying to get her life together. I wish they had a bond like they should because it's a wonderful feeling. I hope things are good for you and thank you for entering.

    • bluecollarlove
      May 8, 2008
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      Great News

      The first few months that she moved away was awkward but we jhave become very close again and are in contact a lot.I t was the worst day of my life.


  • RunningFree
    May 8, 2008
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    Raw

    This poem is a powerful expression that has really stuck with me after reading it. Within your poem, I can feel the anguish of losing Victoria. I am so sorry that you have lost this girl from your life. Thank you for entering this poem into my contest.


  • daviscth silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    This is such a loving message to your child. I can feel your pain and i'm so sorry. I've never understood people playing games with the children as pawns. thanks so much for posting.


  • Frogzter gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    Terribly sad and painful! So sorry for your loss. YOu have expressed it well in this wonderful piece showing much love and caring! Blessings to you!

    Frogz~


  • Star-of-David
    February 4, 2008
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    Apart from the fact in the last stanza 'your' should be "you're", I have to say this is a very touching piece. I can empathise with not being able to say goodbye to someone you hold so close to your heart...it isn't a great feeling at all.
    I hope you were able to work something out after it happened, best of luck in the contest.


  • warrior-eagle
    November 14, 2007

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    I'll have to add at least one HM for this because this is too sad and it deserved a trohpy.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    May 25, 2007

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    TEARS

    This broke my heart for you my friend~ I'm so sorry for your pain...she will always be your little girl in your heart and her'swishing you happiness


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    April 25, 2007

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    I am sorry she was taken from you--at least you wanted to stand up and be a good father--so few men I know do that, and for me it is an admirable trait. You should have no regrets about wanting to be a part of her life, even if what her mother said to spite you had any truth to it. Regardless of blood relations, the desire to treat her as your own is what counts most--I can only hope that you two have a good relationship now. Thank you for entering my contest, and best of luck to you.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • Kristin Melissa
    April 19, 2007

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    This is sad, and no it;s not wrong for you trying to be her dad, it just proves that you loved her with all your heart and you wanted her to be happy...
    ~*~ Mystic


  • cj-renee
    April 18, 2007
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    It doesn't really matter if you're her blood dad or not, there's always that special bond between dad and child. I hope you get to see her again and I know that she must think of you as much as you think of her. You're an amazing person and I wish you the best.

    • bluecollarlove
      April 18, 2007
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      It was rough for about a year then she told me she loved me and called me dad again.She's coming here in june.


  • wings of an angel
    April 16, 2007
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    This is such a sad and emotional write you penned here, no matter if you are not her real dad a bond was formed and she will never forget you for all you done for her, keep the faith things always work out for the best and she will never forget you. This is a great write and good luck in the contest

    • bluecollarlove
      April 18, 2007
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      She was the child I never thought I would have.Then they just kept coming lol.Thanks for the good thoughts and we have a very good relationship now.

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