Lost in confusion,
betrayed by your touch,
but I will not take the blame
for your immaturity
or be your verbal punching bag.
How can you value me
if I don't value myself?
You hurt me and I let you,
but no more.
Like a lioness protecting her young
I take my tattered heart,
promising this is the last time.
I deserve a better man
and he deserves me.
A contest entry
- 15 Lines or Less - Free Verse Only - Self Esteem by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended April 17, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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HOORAH!!! I have a fav quote "Value yourself high, for others will take you at the level which you place yourself first" I most certainly hope that you do/have moved on from this coward!!! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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Good. I like it.
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This is amazing, such a strong, real and true write. I love the girl power theme, which I know sounds immature but hey I'm just a kid myself I get to do that. hehe lol. But this poem was so strong and I respect it so much for that. Loved this write!
~M~
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Very nice piece, great rhythm and flow. Lovely metaphor, very captivating piece. Thanks for your fine entry.
Bunny
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excellentness! i loved your last stanza the best, and the awesome imagery/metaphor "Like a lioness protecting her young
I take my tattered heart," -that was by far the best part for me. good luck to you in the contest!
Rianna
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This was a strong statement you made in the use of this title. No one should ever have to feel this way and your last stanza summed it up perfectly. A very powerful piece of free verse that you penned to share with all of us. It all but screamed off the page at me. Excellent work and best wishes in the contest with this entry. Love you my friend, Joyce
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