Anxious eyes peer down.
Fair Angel views direful scenes of Earth
Astonished by ignorant mirth
From all those wasted souls that lost
A sense of once inherent worth.
Tragedy unfolds 'fore sincere eyes
Her ears embittered by passionate lies
Hands secure in solemn prayer pose
For salvation besides mankind's demise.
Shadows shroud man's future bleak
Veiling righteousness, craven and meek
Angel bows her lovely head
Forcefully brushing tears from her cheek
Ripe Garden of Eden left solitary
Now lacking sweet elixir and berries
A stagnant stretch of industry
Devoid of extinct magic and fairies
Hope lies deep with sunken Atlantis
Frail iridescent wings of praying mantis
Hidden treasure, not forever unredeemed
So long as love is practiced
Bitter divinations begin to transform
Like Angel's features once forlorn
Demure smile upheaves the gloom
Her rosiness tints the world warm
Unite the earth for one last try
To dam the Angel's need to cry
An all inclusive brotherhood
Our peace assures eyes remain dry.
Author notes
To the ChildeofChaos: I had a difficult time separting "Tears from Heaven" and the angel from religion, and I hope that the reference to the Garden of Eden doesn't throw you off too much.
A contest entry
- Tears from Heaven by ChildeOfChaos.
900 points, ended April 23, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any comments are appreciated.
Comments
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very good poem. I like how you did your rhyming. I am asian too.
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This was exactly what I was looking for! Thank you so much for such a wonderful write. I truly enjoyed every line. As for your note, I understand having trouble separating religion from the angel pic and the heaven reference. This was perfectly done. I simply did not want to be preached at. Anything vague reference to God or any higher being would have been acceptable to me, as I do believe there is a God. I think the Garden of Eden reference in your poem only served to add to it and make it more amazing. Again, thank you for an amazing entry!
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nice write..
'Tears from Heaven'....
well it's done beautifully if I must say so...
I am sure it will be liked by every one...
enjoyed the read thank you.
as always;
sandra -
very nice and passionate with a lot of tranquility , very pure and heart warming with a touch of love and grace , i feel several meaning though but i'm still trying to think about what you are thinking when you are writing this , maybe it will come to me but it is very nice to read
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lovely
what a mighty talent for writing you have ,you have writtent his very beautifully great job
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