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Unowhour

If love were as a prism, then
The wisdom I have ascertained
-pertaining to, but not entirely-
The hues of lovers' blues, conclude
And comprise my living diary
Where you and I struck the tune
Oh, the subtle irony [as fate turned]
To deal me a hand of chance and romance
Although, the heart never learned to
Cope, without hope; we are, but few
Of many, lost, and by far [and apart]
Scarred, now, of taupe, then tossed
Or scattered; a mark of the matter was
Important, but hard: because...now,

You know who you are

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From slick to sly, you slyde behind
And invade my soul; you have control
I lose the ground; you rob me blind
Only now can you stare me in the eyes
But you still cannot stare me down

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  • ILTL4eva7
    April 18, 2007
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    Did you change things again? haha, I'm so confused... and just so you know, "you and your author's notes" are for the better, I promise - it's like a two-for-one deal. Out of curiosity, is there any particular reason for the winking face at the end of the top piece? haha, just wondering...
    ~Kelsey


    • April 20, 2007
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      Just a lil bit of this; lil bit of that. And, of course, there is always a reason, beyond a reasonable doubt. So, continue wondering...

  • ILTL4eva7
    April 16, 2007

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    You and your author's notes... :-P. I love both of them. It's like two parts of your mind are trying to present two different arguments in a romantic mess... I won't try to explain, because it's more a picture/feeling in my mind than words, but I'm definitely into it. The only part that seemed a bit off to me was "Cope, without hope;..." those two rhyming words together seem more forced than the rest of the rhyming sets - but don't get me wrong, they still flow better than a lot of people's best rhyming poetry, and I love the use of "taupe" a couple lines down. I really do hope you keep writing - just the experience of reading your work and letting the words flow is... soothing, hypnotic. Gosh, I missed your stuff! I think the ending of the second piece might be my favorite, maybe because it reflects how I've been feeling. Awesome work, sir!
    ~Kelsey


    • April 18, 2007
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      Me, and my author's notes...for better, or for worse?