Envy not the tuneless note
that falls forsaken upon
an infidel of natures' curve
like an unsprung alien song.
Shallow lilt or tempted fate
each cleft lost to silently crave
that one moment of splendored sound
willed upon music's breathless wave.
(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
4/16/2007
A contest entry
- The Best of the Best of the Best, etc. by Heavenly Angel.
1500 points, ended June 13, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A most excellent and awesome sharing this is! Beautifully done! Than you so much for sharing and for being a part of the contest!
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Heavenly Angel
Thank you so much and thank you for holding the contest. Blessings.d
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Exquisite Voice and Imagery
Wow, Sis, I instantly agree with everyone who has commented on this magnificent poem! It's depth is, indeed, as deep as the deepest ocean with its sounds and imagery. Like others, I felt as though I stood on shore's edge as the sea rushed toward me. This glorious piece is in tune with the ocean's every nuance, as it mimics the life within it as well as upon dry land.
Simply exquisite and, as another here said, very much after the masters of old; which is another reason I so enjoy your work. I am sorry I missed this one the day it was posted. Awesome! For the sheer beauty of it, our TSaS members really should see this one: SO, email it.
Lots of love and hugs, SisB♥n
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Bonnie
Thank you so much Sis.. this piece was a joy to write from start to finish. It felt right ..
Thankyou God !! Love and hugs.. debby
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I really love this.
Favorite lines:
"an infidel of natures' curve"
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"willed upon music's breathless wave."
This was simply beautiful. Good job -
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Amaya
I am so glad you enjoyed this. Thank you. Blessings. Debby
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Left me breathless
This is beautiful Debby!
Very melodic and sensual - beautiful use of alliteration and sound in this piece.
Love and hugs,
Joanne
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Jo...
Thank you. This was so much fun to write.. hugs and love.D
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very very nice! great poem here. your wording was excellent. I thought the images you provoked were clear in integrity. I appreciate your enormous talent. thank you for sharing. keep up the great work. peace and light, kendal
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kendal
I appreciate you. Thank you for your wonderful ccomments. Blessings. Debby
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*gapes* Your imagery is amazing! Every line is a new picture coming to rest on top of theprevious. I can hear a surf in your words. This is truly a wonderful piece. Good Job!
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Blossom
~~ Thank you ~~ have a wonderful day ! Debby
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What an amazing crescendo you have here. I love it!
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True
Thank you !! Blessings..d
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Subtle and cunning! Nature's curve-and an infidel upon it? Double sensuous. Second stanza took some time to read in my mind. The first few readings didn't quite get the sound of it but the effort was rewarding.Grand last two lines. Flows like a symphony. Pardon my adjectives.
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shamik
Thank you so much ! Blessings. Debby
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The last line is wonderful...flows so well..nature has a way of capturing words for poetry...lovely, thanks for sharing
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Pruedence
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. I am happy you enjoyed it. Blessings. Debby
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Debby, this is just stunning... it sent chills as I read this, it had sort of a Shakespearean flair, one that does catch your breath! Beautifully written dear poet! All the best to you, Annie
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Annie
Thank you so much Annie. I so appreciate you. Blessings. Debby
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And melodies played to a heart that sings are just beautiful notes on a page.
This is gorgeous and can hear the music in the words. Love, C
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C
Thank you very much. In case you haven't guessed, I love music.. hugs and love, debby
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well i am truly taken with the elegant simplicity and the genuine creativity of your content here. the breathless wave is a timeless poem, rich in imagery and brilliant soundings and was made to be read aloud, no - i mean Out Loud - for all to hear this treasure of a poem. thank you for sharing your beautiful gift. blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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Richard
Thank you so much !! How very kind you are and I truly appreciate your kudos. Blessings. Debby
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kool
i like this one is vry pretty...good write -
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Neph
Tya very much !! Blessings. D
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