Catching teardrops from the moon
Lying naked in full bloom
Satin skin of grape delight
Sweet surrender from the night
Velvet hues of black and blue
Keep the light from getting through
Having faeries strip their wings
For the pleasure of their kings
Underneath the patchwork sky
Clouds become too light to cry
Catching sunbeams from the sun
Lying naked, morn has come
Author notes
A little bit of an enchanting scene, a little ambitious, and a little bit of the other.
A contest entry
- Bouquet of Thorns by Never Fall in Love.
1750 points, ended May 17, 2007, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think.
Comments
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This poem tells so many stories
I liked the part when you said
Sweet surrender from the night
Velvet hues of black and blue
Because you're right
At night, the rose doesn't look lavender
pretty good
It does need some fixing here and there
There are so many emotions
But where do you express them?
play around with this for a while
and get back to me
Thank you for entering
NeveR ♥ -
Welcome to AllPoetry
A stunning poem you have penned. Filled with enchanting imagery, painting a wonderous picture of beauty and some
Glad to have you here at AP and please feel free to contact me or any online Greeter if you need help here at AP.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Enchanting, yes. Ambitious, yes. I like the tempo and the rhyme but your poem seems like every two lines are excerpts from different poems that were pasted into one. I see your scene so well in my mind, but the roses aren't there and the emotions that come with them seem hidden.
-looks around-
oooooooh, there it is! I like this poem. Just had to fish behind some of the stuff blocking what needs to be seen. Great write.
-Nick
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