There -peek
and imagine,
under huddled stone rows,
snake paths to the
Tawny sugar gates
tidal curtains part
from shrunken foyer
where,
veins the sea
gurgling voice in whistles,
‘tween flinted boulder
of ocean’s narrative-
broken crags that revel
by ebbs and ages
God’s creation- left
in puzzle pieces
faring ghosts in whispers
echoing last orations
from Captain and slave
sunken ships
dismembered in
fungus webs of
blood -wet ashes.
the Loved tucked in,
entombed near the
sanctuary of the squid,
Headstones of coral
engraved by crab and fossil
waiting for the upper crust
to float them to their eulogies.
and my body lay
limp
on
the static brook’s narrow shoulder
inside my chest
a beat more than before-
O’ creek, you are a marvel
in my tiny world.
Copyright ©2001Zealberry
M. Dianne Berry/CookieZeal
Author notes
In August of 2000, I took the picture in Maine at the top of an old covered bridge. Isn't it beaaaaaaaautiful?
Written July 17th, 2003
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a beautiful picture and a beautiful poem. Nature is such an inspiration to the muse. Well done, a very enjoyable read.
Rory -
A rich descriptive piece. Very soft and gentle, with a lot of smiles to be found. Artistically pleasing.
Thank you once again for your welcome and for being so kind. -
powerful
amazing. when you are reading it, you don't realize how much it means till the very end. But this poem was amazing and powerful. good job!! -
Oh..thank you so much. O' Creek happens to be one of MY favorites..lol.
Bless you this day, Warmly, CookieZeal -
simply beautiful.
ahh....not only this poem flows like fish in a young rivulet in rhythm, but it also flows in imagery. simply beautiful.
~Elm. -
Ya know... I'm such a "touchy/feely" writer, that i find painting emotion so much easier than painting something visual. You are one of the masters of giving me a visual portrait that I can imagine in my mind with all those fantastic details. Your imagery is exceptional :-)
I adore this... much respect,
~ Wendy -
Wow your poems are long, but that's a good thing. Thank you for the little explanation above, that's something I really should have understood, but I must be tired today
The indepth meaning of this is amazing though. I like how you call it "left in puzzle pieces" 
Also thank you for your comment on Still Waiting!
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Thank you everyone. Basically, it's taking what little paths we have in life and tracing it to the largest tributaries. In this case, it is a small creek to the ocean. I think that way, I suppose. Each tiny something comes from a larger one. A cluster of matter which comes from the larger and master beginning. ....
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Lovely!
well, it is certainly very descriptive .. I wasn't prepared for an abstract-ish poem like this one, though, so I didn't get it the first time around .. it took me several reads, actually. However, once I got through it without "Huh? I dun get it!" I realised just how great and .. well .. epic .. this poem is. It's short chopped up verses are extremely misleading, hiding within them a depth of wonder. There are several stories weaved into this poem, all stemming from the same basic idea .. that is something you don't often see in poetry. Telling the stories of the creek, since it can't speak for itself, you've written a beautiful poem, and I'd like to thank you for posting it! -
you brought all the overlooked beauty of a creek to life. though im hesitant that you would find coral in a creek, its beautiful anyway. =)
jeez cookie... every description brilliant and original every time. how do you do it? hehe. -
I am so glad to be back into the swing of things around here, to be able to read this piece of such fluent imagery in your writing. I have some serious catching up to do. Bravo!
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you have an amazing talent, you can take such a simple thing as a little creek and turn it into a remarkable work of art. Your description is breathtaking, your words sing like a choir of angels, its just amazing to me how you do this. I see some similarity between you and Redstormy, both of you marvel in nature and the little things that we so often take for granted. You both find artistic qualities in the simplest of things, and when you write about them, the reader is truly mesmerized by your words. Just a wonderful poem, my friend, truly wonderful.
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Aunt Cookie,
Neat piece lots of reflections in this, shows how observant you are and how much you can draw from those things around as this.
This showed the beauty and peacefulness , a creek could bring
and yet the humble effect this has upon your heart.
Of life itself and even hardships of what memories or things can be drawn from it both positive or negetive.....Lovely picture with it.....and I tried to draw from it the best I could or reflect even if I don't always see things in the right pictures. Love U,
Sherry
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Oh love this one, I love that picture as well. This could be in Minnesota ...our state has so many of these sites. Lovely write cookie
Red
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