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darker day

 

in timeless treasure

meter measures

 

as sins collide

and world spins

 

backwards

 

on an axis bound

in finger strings

and tape of mask

 

to qualify true qualm

as pleasure paid

in purchased sound

of glory road

in brick to lay

 

staggered in formation

 

upon a play

of word as sky

turns ground in bluer hue

 

of merely chance

or circumstance

 

repelled in dust

as fly to swat

in angered reed

of greed

 

left misunderstand

in hand that holds

 

the cherished grip

 

in faith to face

oncoming night

as brightest day

 

where moon is sun

to spin loving lives

around the turning

of darker day

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  • tara wilson gold member
    April 17, 2007

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    repelled in dust
    as fly to swat
    in angered reed
    of greed, I like this and I like:
    upon a play
    of word as sky
    turns ground in bluer hue
    Makes me think of the sky falling,
    a sad, really good poem...

  • throwing the rocks
    April 16, 2007
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    I will leave a more in depth comment when I'm not so damn confused.


    • wolfspiritguide gold member
      April 17, 2007
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      author comments are so helpful are they not?

      this was a piece torn out, just after i heard about the shootings in Virginia...to clarify a bit

      • throwing the rocks
        April 17, 2007

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        Dear, you don't have any author's comments.

        And I was referring to myself, seeing as I am a confused person, and I just wanted to let you know (even in my state of confusedness) that I loved your poem.

        But thank you TONS (and I mean this is NO way sarcastic) for that clarification. Because, I'm extremely slow. And I wish not to insult this matter in any case. Actually, I just finished writing a paper on it for Socials.

        (I will still leave an in depth comment later)


  • ethreal elf
    April 16, 2007
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    wonderful and sad word play i really liked this bit. keep it up .
    blessed be
    karma


  • kaibab silver member
    April 16, 2007
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    So sad

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