Screaming from downstairs
Try to drown it out
Blare the music and try not to cry
Urging, nagging feeling
From the back of my mind
It's calling me
I try to push it away
I try in vain
I can't resist
In a box
Under the bed
It's waiting for me
Silence between songs
I hear them
"All her fault"
My eyes turn
To rest upon the box
To me it's a piece of heaven
I give in
I scramble for it
I need it
Break the skin
Watch it bleed
Let myself go numb
Sweet bliss
In my misery
Mixed with pain
I feel so dead
Addicted to these
Bitter sweet razorblade kisses
Author notes
Cutting Awareness.
*I DO NOT DO THIS ANYMORE*
A contest entry
- *~-* The Passion of Red *-~* by Dragonsblood.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and everything !! ( a truthwriter's contest ) by sweethelper.
300 points, ended April 22, 2007, 145 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - pick and choose your dark side by SoftlyScreaming.
600 points, ended June 20, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkness, Let Me See Your Darkness by AshesFromFire.
700 points, ended July 21, 2007, 79 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is good i can relate to it.. back in the day i used to have mine just laying on the table in my room .. no one really knew about it couse i moved away when i was 15.. and those who ssaw didnt care.. keep up the good work
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awh that's sad i hope you dont do it anymore tho
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Good write, but I'm glad you don't do it any more. :]
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the term "razorblade kisses" i feel is way overused in dark/cutting poetry
other than that, i liked it
but i loved the first stanza -
Amazing. Just amazing. You're so honest. I really don't know what to say, but this is truly amazing.
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I love this poem babe!!
Its strong and could get the point across to so many people.
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I luhh yew. <3
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A great poem. Your poems are absolutely amazing! Keep it up! This is exactly a situation I've been in many times.
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hahahaha i LOVE IT WOW AGEN it is vary good vary good you should keep on and i bet you can get far
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"Urging, nagging feeling
From the back of my mind
It's calling me"
ugh, god, yes!
i luv those lines.
such a perfect description.
urging, nagging feeling exactly.
wow. this is amazing. the way you've captured the picture here is flawless. i luv it.
"Sweet bliss
In my misery
Mixed with pain"
Peace && Blesses
~Rain
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♥ Glad you like it love
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Blare the music and try not to cry
i loved this line bunches sweet
but all in all this was such a great poem
i loved it bunches though i do hope and pray you
are not doing what is hidden in this poem my love
well i wish you all the best..xxx -
so true
I love you writs! No joke! WOW I love how you described the cutting as a "razorblade kiss" I have never thought of it that way! Good luck in the contest! Keep up the good work!
Darkness
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Reality
This was very deep I wish you luck in the contest, I know the pain of what your going through as well
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Hey,
One more thing!
I just relized something! The contest that you won a hm in with this...you beat me! by 2 places! Very cool! great job! You deseved it! -
wow! very nicly done. I'm speechless! I abso;utly love this poem! This is probly the first non rhyming poem I honestly love! Great job! Good luck in my contest!
You did a great job getting emotion across in this poem. I could see it all playing out in my mind's eye! Bravo! -
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Thank you so much ♥
Ohmigosh, small world lol. & thank you again.
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Wow this is an amazing write. I know your pain all to well. I feel alot of times yes things are all my fault could I have something different. I can relate to this my favorite lines are :Break the skin
Watch it bleed Let myself go numb
Sweet bliss In my misery
Mixed with pain I feel so dead
Addicted to these
Bitter-sweet razorblade kisses
It like to me that nothing else matters at this time your pain just washes away even it is brief it is some relief.
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Thanks for the wonderful comment. :] Yeah I've learned now that there are more important things than hurting myself & that the one second of relief isnt worth the hurt it causes my fiancee.
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First impression ok- I think I know where this is going. Oh my stomach is tightening. I know this feeling. I can't stop reading. Sadness, remorse, sorrow. That was my impression. This poem grips you if you can relate. It's almost scary.
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Thank you. I'm glad you felt it. Well you know. Lol.
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im goin to need your sn - otherwise the poem was absolutley brilliant.. it gave me a visual of what was going on, it gave me a hin of detail.. it gve almost everything i asked for.. it rhymed a little bit, i like that.. it also had rhythm.. what an amazing poem, theres maybe a few things that need changing, but otherwise its good.
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wow im loveing the poem,
it is very deep like it lots great job...*gina*
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such a powerful piece, you say a lot in relativly few words
the short lines are very effective, i love how it is almost a narritive, the way you tell the story, and especially like the ideas such as
Silence between songs
and how the box seems to be talking to you
a wonderful write, i wish you the very best in the contest
lucy
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Thanks so much, this is one of my favorite poems. =]
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Oh wow. This is deep. I dont think if you don't write, that you will understand it. The words and the flow. The way you explain that this helps you, while everyone else thinks it hurts you. Needless to say, it rocks!
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Thankies! C:
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i love the title! so pretty yet dark. sad stuff here. we all wallow in self loathing and drown it out one way or the other eh? good write.
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Yeah, some people just deal with it better, thanks. =]
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You are really good. I love this, it reminds me about my journeys ro find my razors. Lol. <3
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Thanks
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AMAZING...I know exactly what you mean...beautiful and simple. elegant and unique. LOVED IT!
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Thank you very much!
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omg i love this poem i feel the same way as you do. i hope me and u can give up those kisses!
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Thanks! Well, I guess I hope you can too? xD Hehe.
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this was very good and i know how you feel, i feel like that right now.
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I'm sorry you feel this way. =(
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I know that feeling far too well. You did a great job putting this into words, instead of the usual cliché I've been reading everywhere. Great job!
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Thanks, yeah I get so sick of the cliche as well, that's why I decided to write it this way. I mean, how much detail do I need to go into about this subject? I feel like either you know how it is or you don't. And if you give away too much you ruin the poem. Well that's how I think of it anyway. lol.
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This was well written. This was sad and beautiful. I'm sorry you feel this way, I'm sure things will get better as time goes on. God Bless!
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Thanks, and I dont actually feel this way at the moment. The memory was just in mind. C: No worries.
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A very nice read, I saw some words in there that I haven't seen often or at all in other poems. Very nice
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