Chestnut eyes skimmed a crisp page
of the free travel newspaper.
As fingertips curled the page,
the bus hauled us over a speed bump.
Her startled brows raised
as a sigh urged the inked captions on.
Fingers folded the bottom corner
and nails scored, as she tore the page….
I caught a glimpse of her snippet
and my cynical mind breathed,
“who believes the horoscopes?”
Then, I saw her smile
as she folded the paper neatly.
“I wonder what mine says…”
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A girl did just this on this bus this morning.
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I like it. Its just so simple and normal, something tat she would do everyday that no one would probably think much of...but you captured the moment and brought it to a whole new level. Its no longer a simple girl just reading the newspaper, its a simple moment caught in life and stilled. Much like a photograph. -
nice it was terrific you should keep up the good work it will pay off at the end i really like that poem it showed real meaning and emotion.
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This was a nice story, You wrote on something you saw to day, I sometimes cant do that.please return the favor
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Have read mine so many times and find it suits me - fits right in with my plans - how do they know? LOL Very vivid visual in this write - easy to read and understand, you have taken us on that bus and we are there too watching this. I wonder what mine says too.
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I really like the way this is written, I''m left kinda wanting more. I think the flow of this piece is wonderful and so is the imagery you employ throughout. Well done and keep up the great work. Bravo
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it just goes to show inspiration can come in any form. How interesting. Nice work
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