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Ode To My Artemis

 

When the firmament dulls into dusk, 

    my beautiful Artemis takes her pedestal

to hunt the very shadow of my grief.

    What temple shall I build you, my love?
In what style & design? With what ritual, ceremony

           and belief?

Your herbs of love conceal these scars;

   Artemis, who could tell, once upon a time 

trauma had pierced through my flesh. 

   In gratitude have I surrendered myself-

accept me, or I shall grieve like every wound

          were fresh. 

When sorrow descends again as Hera

     and challenges for another Trojan War,

Artemis, now I shall fight your woe.

      My tribute shall rage in every duel,

warmth whisper in every arrow, and love echo in

          every blow.

 Will the soul suffice as sacrifice

or shall I conquer the horizon of mighty Olympus

and make an offering at your noble feet?

In your crescent moonlight, your smile

illuminated inspiration and showed me ecstasy

in defeat 

                                       

Author notes

Option D- a VERY special friend.

Dedicated to my saviour...to my own Artemis, the hunter who shot down my sorrows.

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  • Koios
    July 31, 2008

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    This is a beautiful piece of art. Well-written, thought-provoking.

    I do have to point out, as an classical academic, that Artemis was never worshipped as a moon goddess. That was Selene. It's really a modern convention that she's seen as such. Any statue with a crescent crown is a facsimile with the crown being added later. Read the literature, you'll never find a reference to her being a moon goddess.

    Still, it's a beautiful poem. The picture is beautiful too.


  • Game Master
    June 23, 2007

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    That was very interesting, I've never read anything like it before. You should expect great things from it


  • Alexander Hine
    June 2, 2007
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    Fine work. Congratulations on a well-deserved silver.
    K. F.


  • ibsons hysops
    June 1, 2007
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    Awsome! Your a Finalist!!!


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    May 29, 2007

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    Just Beautiful...

    Dear Brother,

    I am in admiration of your skill and talent at honing a poem as fine as this. This is truly a work of art. I love everything about it. How grateful you are to this person who has hunted down your own sorrows! You have blended in admiration, love, warmth, the strength to do anything for this person and the beauty of nature with the nature of this person, all of this with excellent assonance and alliteration. The poem has a nice flow. The very beginning stanza is so captivating...it makes the reader feel as though the Goddess is seated right next to you and you offer these words to her as a gesture of your love and gratitude to her. I like the rhyme between 'fresh' and 'flesh' in the second stanza. Likewise, I like the rhyming between 'bow' and 'blow' in the third stanza. The last three lines of your poem - I just love them!!
    Last but not the least, I really like the picture of Artemis above. Thank you for sharing

    All the best and brightest blessings,
    Charishma


  • Foxydaze14
    May 26, 2007

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    I love all the details and the form. You did an excellent job. It's very interesting and makes me want more. Bravo!


  • Suberu14
    May 23, 2007

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    An interesting write; It was very vivid and detailed and it flowed nicely. I've noticed you won first in a previous contest and I second the opinion of that judge that you deserved the win. I love your poem! Good luck in my contest.


  • Artemis Gem
    May 22, 2007
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    Yes! Artemis! >.> Greek mythology!
    Wonderful description of her

    When sorrow descends again as Hera

    and challenges for another Trojan War,

    Artemis, now I shall fight your woe.

    My tribute shall rage in every duel,

    warmth whisper in every arrow, and love echo in

    every blow.

    keep it up!

    pegleg

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    May 8, 2007
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    Beatiful write, very creative use of words to paint emotion and imagery. The subtle rhyme scheme is very nice as well. *hug*s and best wishes always... ~Genie~ Note: Due to high volume of entries, I'll be using a scoring system to judge after the contest closes.


  • MissAnonymous
    April 23, 2007
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    congrats on your win!


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    April 22, 2007
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    The Greek Mythology and Tragedy Contest has been judged. This was an extremely difficult task due to all of your entries being fabulous. I had to narrow it down to just a few for the trophies and the criteria that I used for this was the following, (in order of importance): 1. Originality 2. Interpretation and Application 3. Emotion and/or depth of thought 4. Form, flow and style 5. Sentence structure, grammar and punctuation Also, a little more consideration was given to new writes... but I cannot stress enough what a challenge this contest was to judge because ALL of the entries were so good. I worked up some extra points to give all of the remaining entries an Honorable Mention with a bonus of 30 points each because I felt that all of the poems were worthy of merit. This contest was very close, as far as the trophy winners went. Every poem in this contest had merit, and that is why I decided to give the rest of the poems an Honorable Mention each. I loved all of them! Also, I am including all of your poems on my List of Greek Mythology and Tragedy Favorites on my page, so that I easily reference them in the future to read. Again, thanks for all of your wonderful poems and I enjoyed reading all of them.


  • IAmAlreadyGone
    April 17, 2007

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    oops! it's "noble" not "nobel".. that's as in the nobel prize for medicine n blah. know what i mean? ciao


  • IAmAlreadyGone
    April 17, 2007
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    Will the soul suffice as sacrifice

    or shall I conquer the horizon of mighty Olympus

    and make an offering at your "nobel" feet?

    >> it's nobl


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    April 17, 2007
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    The Greek Mythology and Tragedy Contest is over. All of your entries were impressive and it's going to be a hard to choose among several favorites for the trophies, as well as the others for Honorable Mention. You all deserve a prize here! They were all fantastic and I derived great pleasure from reading them. I will need a few days to decide, and I may even take up to a week to read the poems over and make careful choices.

    Thank you again, my beloved Poets for your beautiful and thoughtful entries into this contest. You are appreciated more that you can realize.

    Regards,

    Love and Peace


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    Exquisite! I could not have said it any better my self, my Soul...Artemis is my Goddess as well, and showed Herself in a vision to me, a vision of unconditional love. This was the most wonderfully written tribute I have ever read because I can tell that every word is directly written from your heart and soul!

    I was swept away by emotion upon reading this, because I related so deeply having been abused at a very young age and the Love and Beauty that is Her coming to me and comforting me with hope and healing.

    The love and devotion, as well as gratitude that your poem relates for Artemis is absolutely inspirational. I will cherish this poem always...for it speaks from my heart and soul as well to my (our) Goddess...


    The entire poem was impressive...and these words really spoke to me;

    "to hunt the very shadow of my grief"

    "Your herbs of love conceal these scars;"

    "Artemis, now I shall fight your woe."

    "Will the soul suffice as sacrifice"


    Thank you for this most loving and honoring song to Our Mother...and I humbly appreciate that you entered your poem into the contest...





    • Raazi
      April 17, 2007

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      Thank you for the encouragement dear. And also for the opportunity and inspiration.


      • kareneisenlord gold member
        April 23, 2007
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        That's why you got the gold... because I can tell that this poem IS your heart. It is very beautifully done; everything about it! Congratulations... you deserve it!

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