AFTERWARD
only blood drips onto the floor
as screams can still be heard
and weeping still caries on
in the middle of the night..
MURDER
They will all scream in the morning
never understanding fully
about what happened that night
when they all died so cruelly..
VAMPIRES
Were the cause of death
and their ashes still lay
in that room filled with blood
and revenge..
NEVER
Will they strike again
as they now perish in hell
till the end
of time..
Author notes
mmk well.. think the poem says it all.. dark.. not nesicarilly scary.. well not to me..
It may not rhyme but I couldn't help entering it.. just had the urge to enter it in your contest Erin200 .. Option NO 2. Something Dark
A contest entry
- ~Darkest Of Dark~ by XxMysticalFantasyxX.
450 points, ended April 30, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter! At your own free will.... by Erin200.
600 points, ended April 28, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Creative style you have used here - differenet with the capitalized first word and then the others that follow below. Fitting conclusion,.
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thanks! I don't exactly know why I did that, but people seem to love it so I certainly have no complaints =]
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very different
This is written well and your story line is really spooky. LOL Well done.
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thank you!! im glad you enjoyed my dark poem
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Interesting form to be certain, I think it is complimentary to the subject. Not a big Vampyre fan but this one more hinted at the stuff I dislike in them rather than boldly glaring gore! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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thanks! not everyone likes vampires and that's a good thing, it just shows that everyoneis different. we all like dfferent things. thanks for taking the time to comment.
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ahhhhh!!!! fantastic imagery!!!! i mean i walk away from this with this whole big story and loads of inspiration! ~im in the middle of a vampire book now
~ and now i know how i should do next!
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glad I coul inspire you awesome a vampire book!! when will you be getting it published? an wats it called?
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Hmm..
I'm not too sure about this one. I've seen you write deathy things before, but this was a bit too heavy for my liking. Well that's just my opinion. <3
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hmmm... blonde moment mel .. Lol!! hahahahaha!!!
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Wow
very well written piece. I like the way you've got it set up and all, kudos. -
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thanks!! =] glad you like it!
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Great poem and thanks for entering I'm glad you did... This poem was very dark I really liked it...You are very talented my favorite part of this poem was "AFTERWARD
only blood drips onto the floor
as screams can still be heard
and weeping still caries on
in the middle of the night..
and I loved the vampire part to this was a great poem and thanks again for entering!!
XLadyMoonMistressX
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